A poor man

[chunchuntthn]

A poor man

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Bob, a poor farmer, was often moaning that he was born in a poor family. If he was born in a rich family, his life would have changed.

A fairy man lived far away from a village which bob lived. The fairy man could help Bob become richer before. Bob decided that he had to look for/find him. Bob had to climb over the mountains and went through dense jungles. Finally, he reached there where the fairy man lived. When Bob met the fairy man, the fairy man said: “God always give people chances to become rich and be successful. So why do you find me?”

This is section one, please correct my mistakes.

 

[Tarheel]

A poor man

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Bob, a poor farmer, was often moaning that he had been born in a poor family. If he had been born in a rich family, his life would have been different.

A fairy man lived far away from the village where Bob lived. The fairy man could help Bob become wealthy. Bob decided that he had to meet him. Bob had to climb over [STRIKE]the[/STRIKE] mountains and walk through dense jungles. Finally, he arrived at the town where the fairy man lived. When Bob met the fairy man, the fairy man said: “God always gives people chances to become rich and be successful. So why did you come to see me?”

This is section one, please correct my mistakes.

Wow!

 

[chunchuntthn]

This is my rewrite.
Bob, a farmer, often moaned that he had been born in a poor family. If he had been born in a rich family, his life would have been different.
A fairy man lived far away from the village where Bob lived. The fairy man could help Bob become wealthy. Bob decided that he had to meet him. Bob had to climb over mountains and walk through dense jungles. Finally, he arrived at the town where the fairy man lived. When Bob the fairy man, the fairy man said: “God always gives people chances to become rich and be successful. So why did you come to see me?”.

“The fairy man could help Bob become wealthy”. Could I use “rich” instead of “wealthy”?

 

[Tarheel]

Yes.

 

[chunchuntthn]

Yes.

So "rich" and "wealthy " is the same meaning, right?

 

[Disckstuckinfan]

So "reach" and "wealthy " is the same meaning, right?

You mean "rich".

 

[chunchuntthn]

Yes, rich.

 

[Tarheel]

So "rich" and "wealthy " mean the same thing, right?

Yes, they do.

You might say:

Bob complained about having been born to a poor family, and he wished his parents had been rich.

 

[chunchuntthn]

A poor man (part two).

Bob explained/answered: “Every day, he works very hard, but he is not still rich”. The fairy man smiled and agreed to help him. The fairy man said: “Every day he goes to the sand near his village and find a rock. If the rock shines, you have to grasp it tightly and it will help you become rich”.

Bob came back home and every day, he went to the sand beside the river. After some months, he couldn’t find the rock. He thought (that) the fairy man lied him. While he was angry, he grabbed a rock and threw it away. The rock glowed, exploded and the fairy man appeared and said: “You are not patient enough to grab chances when you threw the rock”.

Please correct my mistakes.

 

[Tarheel]

You need to start a new thread for part two, and post a link to it here.

Also, since Bob is talking about himself, he should say:

I have been working very hard every day, but I'm not rich.

For how long? A week? A month. A year? Bob seems to be an impatient man (which is why he will miss opportunities).

 

[Tarheel]

By "sand" I am guessing you mean beach. But I'm not sure.

 

[chunchuntthn]

By "sand" I am guessing you mean beach. But I'm not sure.

No, there is a sand next to the river near his village.

 

[chunchuntthn]

This is the link to part two: https://www.usingenglish.com/forum/threads/273653-A-poor-man-(part-two)

 

[Tarheel]

No, there is a sand next to the river near his village.

That's a beach. There is no such thing as a sand.

 

[chunchuntthn]

That's a beach. There is no such thing as a sand.

Something is similar to this picture.

 

[Tarheel]

It's similar to this picture.
View attachment 3204

That's a beach.

 

[chunchuntthn]

That's a beach.

I think that is the shore of the river.

 

[Tdol]

What do you mean by fairy man? Why do you need to specify the gender?

 

[chunchuntthn]

What do you mean by fairy man? Why do you need to specify the gender?

Actually, I am not sure. You meant (that) only need the fairy is enough.