Results 1 to 2 of 2
  1. VIP Member
    Student or Learner
    • Member Info
      • Native Language:
      • Bosnian
      • Home Country:
      • Bosnia Herzegovina
      • Current Location:
      • Sweden

    • Join Date: Mar 2008
    • Posts: 6,671
    #1

    Gina looked herself in the mirror

    Have I made any mistakes?

    Gina looked herself in the mirror and regretfully had to admit that she was not the beauty she once had been. When she was younger, men used to wolf-whistle at her and tell her how sexy she was. She found them annoying and often would cross the street if she saw a group of them coming in her direction. But years had added weight to her figure and wrinkles were spreading unstoppably on her face. A wolf-whistle would be welcome nowadays, or a compliment but, unfortunately, she had become invisible in men's eyes.

  2. Senior Member
    Other
    • Member Info
      • Native Language:
      • English
      • Home Country:
      • Canada
      • Current Location:
      • Canada

    • Join Date: Jan 2009
    • Posts: 1,379
    #2

    Re: Gina looked herself in the mirror

    Gina looked at herself in the mirror, and to her regret had to admit that she was not the beauty she once had been. When she was younger, men used to wolf-whistle at her and tell her how sexy she was. She found them annoying and often would cross the street when she saw a group of them coming toward her. But the years had added weight to her figure and unstoppable wrinkles were spreading on her face. Now she longed for a wolf-whistle or a compliment -- but men's eyes no longer saw her at all.

    I've suggested the relocation of "unstoppable" and revised the closing for the sake of rhythm.
    Last edited by abaka; 03-Sep-2019 at 17:17.
    Retired proofreader. ESL tutor. Not a teacher. Nor a typist, evidently.

Posting Permissions

  • You may not post new threads
  • You may not post replies
  • You may not post attachments
  • You may not edit your posts
  •