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    #1

    Paul believed he had been living in paradise

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    Paul believed he had been living in paradise until one day he returned home unexpectedly and found his wife in the arms of another man. He had never been so furious in his life, but managed to control himself. He didn't want to spend years in prison for a double murder and left the home without saying a word. He rented a hotel room for two days and went back with a removal van to collect his things. Ten years of his life were washed down the drain.

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    #2

    Re: Paul believed he had been living in paradise

    One comma is essential: He didn't want to spend years in prison for a double murder, and left home without saying a word. Well done!
    Last edited by abaka; 01-Sep-2019 at 01:42.
    Retired proofreader. ESL tutor. Not a teacher. Nor a typist, evidently.

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    #3

    Re: Paul believed he had been living in paradise

    How about believed his life had been perfect?

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