Paul believed he had been living in paradise

Status
Not open for further replies.

Bassim

VIP Member
Joined
Mar 1, 2008
Member Type
Student or Learner
Native Language
Bosnian
Home Country
Bosnia Herzegovina
Current Location
Sweden
Have I made any mistakes?

Paul believed he had been living in paradise until one day he returned home unexpectedly and found his wife in the arms of another man. He had never been so furious in his life, but managed to control himself. He didn't want to spend years in prison for a double murder and left the home without saying a word. He rented a hotel room for two days and went back with a removal van to collect his things. Ten years of his life were washed down the drain.
 

abaka

Senior Member
Joined
Jan 12, 2009
Member Type
Other
Native Language
English
Home Country
Canada
Current Location
Canada
One comma is essential: He didn't want to spend years in prison for a double murder, and left home without saying a word. Well done!
 
Last edited:

Tdol

No Longer With Us (RIP)
Staff member
Joined
Nov 13, 2002
Native Language
British English
Home Country
UK
Current Location
Japan
How about believed his life had been perfect?
 
Status
Not open for further replies.
Top