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    Rain is a natural phenomenon. It was created when the sun shines in the face of the oceans. This makes water steaming and they were kept in the clouds. The winds will blow the clouds from the sea inside the land. Here, the clouds meet the cool air. The steam will condense into small drops of water. They are heavier than the air and fall into rain.

    Please correct my mistakes.

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    Re: Rain

    For a start, change all the verbs into the present tense. You are describing a general fact - how rain is created.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Quote Originally Posted by emsr2d2 View Post
    For a start, change all the verbs into the present tense. You are describing a general fact - how rain is created.
    I have changed all the verbs into the present tense.

    Rain is a natural phenomenon. It is created when the sun shines in the face of the oceans. This makes water steaming and they are kept in the clouds. The winds blow the clouds from the sea inside the land. Here, the clouds meet the cool air. The steam condenses into small drops of water. They are heavier than the air and fall into rain.
    Last edited by emsr2d2; 02-Sep-2019 at 16:14.

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    Re: Rain

    The verbs are now correct for expressing a general fact.

    You need to research how rain is formed a little more, though. For a start, the sun turns moisture from all surfaces (plants, lakes, land, seas) into vapour.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: Rain

    Quote Originally Posted by emsr2d2 View Post
    The verbs are now correct for expressing a general fact.

    You need to research how rain is formed a little more, though. For a start, the sun turns moisture from all surfaces (plants, lakes, land, seas) into vapour.
    Actually, this is a difficult subject for me to complete this paragraph, because this subject has a lot of new words related to science

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    Re: Rain

    In that case, I suggest you try to write about something else - something you understand better.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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