Rain

[chunchuntthn]

Rain​

Rain is a natural phenomenon. It was created when the sun shines in the face of the oceans. This makes water steaming and they were kept in the clouds. The winds will blow the clouds from the sea inside the land. Here, the clouds meet the cool air. The steam will condense into small drops of water. They are heavier than the air and fall into rain.

Please correct my mistakes.

 

[emsr2d2]

For a start, change all the verbs into the present tense. You are describing a general fact - how rain is created.

 

[chunchuntthn]

For a start, change all the verbs into the present tense. You are describing a general fact - how rain is created.

I have changed all the verbs into the present tense.

Rain is a natural phenomenon. It is created when the sun shines in the face of the oceans. This makes water steaming and they are kept in the clouds. The winds blow the clouds from the sea inside the land. Here, the clouds meet the cool air. The steam condenses into small drops of water. They are heavier than the air and fall into rain.

 

[emsr2d2]

The verbs are now correct for expressing a general fact.

You need to research how rain is formed a little more, though. For a start, the sun turns moisture from all surfaces (plants, lakes, land, seas) into vapour.

 

[chunchuntthn]

The verbs are now correct for expressing a general fact.

You need to research how rain is formed a little more, though. For a start, the sun turns moisture from all surfaces (plants, lakes, land, seas) into vapour.

Actually, this is a difficult subject for me to complete this paragraph, because this subject has a lot of new words related to science

 

[emsr2d2]

In that case, I suggest you try to write about something else - something you understand better.

 

[chunchuntthn]

For the next time, I will try to write simpler things.

 

[Tarheel]

Unfortunately, you got a lot of your facts wrong. Also, say;

The water falls as rain


(Note that water does not usually evaporate as steam. For one thing, if it did it would be visible.)

 

[emsr2d2]

[STRIKE]For the[/STRIKE] Next time, I will try to write about simpler things.

We look forward to reading your next piece.

 

[NamelessKing]

We look forward to reading your next piece.

Sarcasm? :lol:

 

[Tarheel]

I think not.

 

[emsr2d2]

Sarcasm? :lol:

Not at all. I'm keen to help chunchuntthn. He/She just needs to start at the right level.

(Trust me, I'm not above sarcasm!)