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    Throughout history, different philosophical schools

    Have I made any mistakes?

    Throughout history, different philosophical schools and philosophers had different ideas about the meaning of life. While some held that the meaning of life was in pleasure and happiness, others had a complete opposite view and believed that it was in suffering and pain.

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    #2

    Re: Throughout history, different philosophical schools

    It could be improved.

    1) There's no need for the first different.
    2) I'd swap the order of philosophical schools and philosophers.
    3) Use the present perfect in the first sentence.
    4) Say either the complete opposite or a completely opposite.
    5) Change and believed to , believing.

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    Re: Throughout history, different philosophical schools

    Would this version be OK?

    Throughout history, philosophers and philosophical schools have different ideas about the meaning of life. While some held that the meaning of life was in pleasure and happiness, others had the complete opposite view, believing that it was in suffering and pain.

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    Re: Throughout history, different philosophical schools

    You've missed my point number 3.

    Another thing, which I missed before, is your use of the past tense was in the second sentence. Use is instead.

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    #5

    Re: Throughout history, different philosophical schools

    Would this version be OK?

    Throughout history, philosophers and philosophical schools have had different ideas about the meaning of life. While some held that the meaning of life is pleasure and happiness, others had the complete opposite view, believing that it is in suffering and pain.

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    #6

    Re: Throughout history, different philosophical schools

    Now you've missed in in the second sentence.

    Apart from that, it's fine.

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