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    There I was sitting at a desk in the library

    Could you please correct my sentences?

    There I was sitting at a desk in the library working on my computer when all of a sudden the fire alarm (went or goes?) off. I figured it was just a malfunction, as it sounds every day for a few seconds, but it kept ringing. Soon after, a member of the staff came and told us to leave the building. I though to myself "this may be a fire drill" but later I learned a fire was actually occurring in one corridor.
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    #2

    Re: There I was sitting at a desk in the library

    The fire alarm went off.

    There actually was a fire.
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    #3

    Re: There I was sitting at a desk in the library

    "Went", but "goes" works if the speaker tries to place the listener in the situation of the moment as, "I am sitting at a desk.......when the alarm goes off".

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    Re: There I was sitting at a desk in the library

    Quote Originally Posted by Yankee View Post
    "Went", but "goes" works if the speaker tries to place the listener in the situation of the moment as, "I am sitting at a desk.......when the alarm goes off".
    So the entire piece should be written in present simple?
    To live only for some future goal is shallow. It's the sides of the mountain that sustain life, not the top.

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    Re: There I was sitting at a desk in the library

    Quote Originally Posted by NamelessKing View Post
    So the entire piece should be written in present simple?
    Did you notice the word "if"?
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    Re: There I was sitting at a desk in the library

    Quote Originally Posted by Tarheel View Post
    Did you notice the word "if"?
    I did. So if I want to change the style, all the verbs should be in present simple, right?
    Last edited by NamelessKing; 24-Sep-2019 at 17:09.
    To live only for some future goal is shallow. It's the sides of the mountain that sustain life, not the top.

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    #7

    Re: There I was sitting at a desk in the library

    Yes.

    Please note that I've moved this thread to the Editing & Writing Topics forum. If you're asking for proofreading of passages of more than one sentence, please post them here.

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    #8

    Re: There I was sitting at a desk in the library

    I have merged your two threads with identical titles. There was no need for a new thread.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    #9

    Re: There I was sitting at a desk in the library

    Quote Originally Posted by emsr2d2 View Post
    I have merged your two threads with identical titles. There was no need for a new thread.
    I don't recall creating a new thread. xD
    To live only for some future goal is shallow. It's the sides of the mountain that sustain life, not the top.

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    #10

    Re: There I was sitting at a desk in the library

    Never mind.

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