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#1 04-Oct-2019, 09:43Reflection of Pond
Would someone correct my writing?
Reflection of Pond
There's a serene crystal clear pond. A white cloud was floating over, and casting her reflection on it. Then the cloud turned into rain, falling into the pond.
When the rain stops, the pond is eagerly looking up the skies again for the white cloud and searching down the becautiful reflection in its heart, yet neither is there. The pond sighs"Alas, whatever I see must just be my illusion."Please correct my writing if there's any grammatical solecism.
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#2 04-Oct-2019, 15:57Re: Reflection of Pond
Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.
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#3 04-Oct-2019, 17:06Re: Reflection of Pond
In my eyes of imagination when I was writing then, they were feminine.
Please correct my writing if there's any grammatical solecism.
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#4 04-Oct-2019, 21:01Re: Reflection of Pond
Yes. Just a form of poetic license.
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#5 05-Oct-2019, 14:13Re: Reflection of Pond
Wouldn't the pond use the past tense for this cloud?
