[Essay] Emailing a university

[Rand alsallaq]

I wrote this email for some university, and I want you to correct it to me please. Than you

Respected madam/sir,


I hope you're doing good. The purpose of writing this email is that I want to ask about the scholarships available in the university of Sydney for masters in linguistics along with its eligibility criteria as well as the procedure to apply for it. Also please let me know the documents required for it. And please let me know the dates to apply for the scholarship(s). Thank you in advance.


Yours sincerely

 

[Yankee]

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[STRIKE]Respected madam/sir, [/STRIKE]
Dear Sir or Madam,

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Yours sincerely

This is too serious a subject to be requested by e-mail.