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    #11

    Re: Wth the operation, the shopping mall

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    Here we have night different lines of trains going from this end to other ends of the city.
    This one needs a lot of work. Try again.
    4. Nouns and verbs need to agree in number.
    Yes. My English needs improving.

    Here we have night different lines of trains going from this end to other ends of the city.
    I know exactly this sentence suffers from being unnatural but I don't know how to express myself better. I'd love to try more than I can. Here's my new attempt.

    We have night different subway lines here in Chongqing and they go through different parts of the city.

    The metro system is very similar to the one in Beijing. So I think J&K Tutoring you understand what I'm trying to say.

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    #12

    Re: Wth the operation, the shopping mall

    Perhaps:

    With the new subway line, more and more people are going to the mall.

    Silver, why didn't you stick with "nine lines"?
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    #13

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    I don't understand "... more than nine lines..." Does that mean there are ten? Subway lines are easily countable to report the actual number, I would think.
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    #14

    Re: Wth the operation, the shopping mall

    Try this exercise:
    Copy/paste your original post. Put a number 1 before the first sentence. At the end of that sentence, return to place the second sentence on a new line and place number 2 before it and so on to leave your original post intact but each sentence is separate and numbered. Now analyze each sentence according to the criteria I suggested and correct as needed. Hint: my suggestions are more-or-less in the order I found errors.

    I think you know the rules of proper English grammar, you just need a way to look at each part separately.

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    #15

    Re: Wth the operation, the shopping mall

    Quote Originally Posted by Tarheel View Post
    I don't know what "night different lines of trains" means.
    The word "night" needs to be corrected to "nine" in order to make the sentence make sense.

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    #16

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    Quote Originally Posted by J&K Tutoring View Post
    I don't understand "... more than nine lines..." Does that mean there are ten? Subway lines are easily countable to report the actual number, I would think.
    I don't count the number and I can see there are one or two more lines running each year. So I guess it's more than nine lines.

    Silver, why didn't you stick with "nine lines"?
    Please see above, Tarheel.

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    #17

    Re: Wth the operation, the shopping mall

    Try this exercise:Copy/paste your original post. Put a number 1 before the first sentence. At the end of that sentence, return to place the second sentence on a new line and place number 2 before it and so on to leave your original post intact but each sentence is separate and numbered. Now analyze each sentence according to the criteria I suggested and correct as needed. Hint: my suggestions are more-or-less in the order I found errors.I think you know the rules of proper English grammar, you just need a way to look at each part separately.
    1) I went to a shopping mall a year or so ago for an interview; It took me two hours to get there. 2) It is * not far but I neede* to take two buses to get there. 3) Yesterday I went there again and it was much quicker. It took only 30 minutes due to the new subway line. 4) Here we have nine different lines of trains going from this end to other ends of the city. 5) Because of this new line, more and more people are going to that shopping mall. I wrote a sentence "With the new operation of the subway line, the shopping mall are visited by more people".*Now I can still reach the shopping mall within a two-bus ride. So I don't know if I should use past tense or present tense. If I use past tense, yes, this did happen already. But the fact is still there, I should stick to the present.
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    #18

    Re: Wth the operation, the shopping mall

    Silverobama, the word "night" needs to be corrected to "nine" in sentence 4. "Night different lines" is incorrect.

    Where did you arrive at the nine lines figure? According to the Chongging Rail Transit site there are only five lines. Reference

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    Quote Originally Posted by Amigos4 View Post
    Silverobama, the word "night" needs to be corrected to "nine" in sentence 4. "Night different lines" is incorrect.

    Where did you arrive at the nine lines figure? According to the Chongging Rail Transit site there are only five lines. Reference

    I will never lie to people who help me. I'm a Buddhist; I almost never lie to others. If I told one lie, I would use more than ten excuses to cover it up.

    I know sometimes websites are so powerful that people even totally trust what they say, but not in your case, Amigos4. I don't know if there's someone updating that page but I'll swear there are more than nine subway lines going around the city. The newly one I mentioned in my OP is called Huan Xian, which means the subway goes around the city in a circular tour.

    You're always welcome to visit my city and you'll be my guest.

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    #20

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    I meant why didn't you stick with "nine lines" instead of using "night lines" more than once?
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