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    Wth the operation, the shopping mall

    Hi.

    I went to a shopping mall a year or so ago for an interview. It took me two hours to get there. It is not far but I need to take two buses to get there. Yesterday I went there again, it was much quicker, only 30 minutes, due to the subway line. Here we have night different lines of trains going from this end to other ends of the city. Because of this new line, more and more people are going to that shopping mall. I wrote a sentence "With the new operation of the subway line, the shopping mall are visited by more people".

    I wonder if the sentence is natural.

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    Re: Wth the operation, the shopping mall

    The sentence is not correct as it is. There are many ways to fix it. Here's one:

    The new subway line has seen more people visiting the mall.

    And here's another more casual version, which is more natural as spoken:

    Since the new subway line opened, there have been more visitors to the mall.

    Remember to tell us in future if you want your sentences to be written or spoken, because it can make a big difference as to what sounds natural.
    Last edited by jutfrank; 31-Oct-2019 at 04:18.

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    Re: Wth the operation, the shopping mall

    Quote Originally Posted by Silverobama View Post
    Hi.

    I went to a shopping mall a year or so ago for an interview. It took me two hours to get there. It is not far but I had to take two buses to get there. Yesterday I went there again, it was much quicker, only 30 minutes, due to the subway line. Here we have night different lines of trains going from this end to other ends of the city. Because of this new line, more and more people are going to that shopping mall. I wrote a sentence "With the new operation of the subway line, the shopping mall is visited. by more people"

    I wonder if the sentence is natural.
    I don't know what "night different lines of trains" means.
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    Re: Wth the operation, the shopping mall

    Quote Originally Posted by Tarheel View Post
    I don't know what "night different lines of trains" means.
    Let's say there are many lines of subway trains going to different places. Line 1 starts from A and reaches B. Line 2 starts from C and ends at D. Of course, there are many stops between A and B, C and D.

    And we have more than 9 different lines of subway trains going to different places.

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    Re: Wth the operation, the shopping mall

    More to add:

    One of my students who is a going to take an oral English test in his company, he asked me to help him asking the question (It was a bit urgent) and I also asked this question on WR. I asked the question here. Here's the link on WR. It's a sub forum merely open to members who have stayed there more than six months. And just now I got an answer from Elroy. Here's the link. Thank you so much. Next time I won't ask on both sides together. If it's urgent, I'll ask there. But here's a good place where I always learn perfect English!

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    Re: Wth the operation, the shopping mall

    OK. It makes sense to have nine or more subway lines.
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    Re: Wth the operation, the shopping mall

    Quote Originally Posted by Silverobama View Post
    More to add:

    One of my students who is a going to take an oral English test at his company. He asked me to ask a question for him.
    Two things. One, what's the question? Two, say:

    It's a subforum only open to members who have been there six months or longer.
    Last edited by Tarheel; 31-Oct-2019 at 12:20.
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    #8

    Re: Wth the operation, the shopping mall

    Tarheel, you have an extra word in your correction box. You might want to make an additional correction to set the record straight.

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    Re: Wth the operation, the shopping mall

    You can do better!

    1. Verb tenses
    2. Conjunctions
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    Here we have night different lines of trains going from this end to other ends of the city.
    This one needs a lot of work. Try again.
    4. Nouns and verbs need to agree in number.

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    Re: Wth the operation, the shopping mall

    Quote Originally Posted by Tarheel View Post
    Two things. One, what's the question? Two, say:

    It's a subforum only open to members who have been there six months or longer.
    The question in the OP.

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