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    #1

    I hadn't even taken four steps when

    Are my sentences correct?

    I hadn't even taken four steps when I heard a shotgun being loaded. I turned to my left and spotted a colossal human shadow that uttered "Get off my land". I squeaked and bolted.
    To live only for some future goal is shallow. It's the sides of the mountain that sustain life, not the top.

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    #2

    Re: I hadn't even taken four steps when

    NamelessKing, please post threads for editing in this forum rather than Ask a Teacher.

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    #3

    Re: I hadn't even taken four steps when

    So, is the Ask a Teacher €‹section only for specific questions about grammar and vocab?
    To live only for some future goal is shallow. It's the sides of the mountain that sustain life, not the top.

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    #4

    Re: I hadn't even taken four steps when

    Quote Originally Posted by NamelessKing View Post
    So, is the Ask a Teacher section only for specific questions about grammar and vocabulary?
    Ideally, yes.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    #5

    Re: I hadn't even taken four steps when

    Did you see the person or just the shadow? (Shadows don't talk.)
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    Re: I hadn't even taken four steps when

    Quote Originally Posted by Tarheel View Post
    Did you see the person or just the shadow? (Shadows don't talk.)
    Just the shadow.

    How about "...spotted a colossal human shadow and heard "Get off my land" from a gruff voice"?
    To live only for some future goal is shallow. It's the sides of the mountain that sustain life, not the top.

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    #7

    Re: I hadn't even taken four steps when

    Yes. I like that one better. (It sounds scary.)
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