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    #1

    There are so many people in the suparmarket because of the discount day

    Hi.

    Today is November 11th. It is written as 11.11 here as a special day originally to celebrate one's being single. Later, this day becomes an online shopping day because most of the things are on sale. Today, to my surprise, a supermarket also put many of its goods on sale. I see so many people in the supermarket because of today and I wrote a sentence for it "There are so many people in the supermarket because of the discount day today".

    I wonder if you can help me to improve the sentence to natural.

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    #2

    Re: There are so many people in the suparmarket because of the discount day

    Please post threads which need to be edited here in the Editing & Writing Topics forum.

    Edit: Post has now been moved.
    Last edited by emsr2d2; 11-Nov-2019 at 13:58.

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    #3

    Re: There are so many people in the suparmarket because of the discount day

    Try:

    The day became a popular online shopping day because so many things are on sale that day.
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    #4

    Re: There are so many people in the suparmarket because of the discount day

    Perhaps:

    There are many people in the supermarket today because of the bargains.
    Not a professional teacher

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