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  1. Newbie
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      • Native Language:
      • Chinese
      • Home Country:
      • Taiwan
      • Current Location:
      • Taiwan

    • Join Date: Nov 2019
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    #1

    Please help! Motivation letter!

    Hi, Iím a Taiwanese student and Iím preparing for my application. Please help me to improve it! Thanks a lot!

    Through previous experience of participating in an exchange activity to Japan and guiding Norwegian students on our school exchange program, Iíve developed social skills to get along well with different people of different cultures.

    Before going to Japan, I searched for their taboos to keep me polite. I joined their basketball club and found that discovering a common interest is the most efficient icebreaker. The same techniques can be applied when I study abroad, especially because parties and school clubs abound in western countries.

    Also, I trained with a Norwegian on a basketball team for six months. Sometimes cultural misunderstanding occurred such as different views on tactics. She used to play on personal skills rather than teamwork, which we focused on. But eventually, both sides make concessions by listening and accepting each other views.

    My experience improves my skills to integrate with people of different ethnicities. Also, I plan to learn Dutch and German as languages will be the last barriers of blending into different cultures.

  2. Tarheel's Avatar
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      • Native Language:
      • American English
      • Home Country:
      • United States
      • Current Location:
      • United States

    • Join Date: Jun 2014
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    #2

    Re: Please help! Motivation letter!

    I am surprised to learn that Japan is a Western country.


    Some free advice follows. You underlined the entire opening sentence. Why??? (Okay, that's not really advice.) You thanked me before I did anything. Why? (Again, that's not really advice.) I suggest that you forget the phrase previous experience. It's pointless. In the first sentence you say you are are applying for something, but even after I read the thing I couldn't figure out what it is that you are applying for. Finally, your first sentence is missing a comma.
    Not a professional teacher

  3. Tarheel's Avatar
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      • United States
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    • Join Date: Jun 2014
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    #3

    Re: Please help! Motivation letter!

    Try:

    people from different cultures
    Not a professional teacher

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