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    in terms of equality of opportunity

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    One of the issues in our community is cafes in the park. The city government changed all of them to the ones run by seniors. The policy is for the sake of seniors' welfare. But the cafes named "Silver Cafe" has become an issue.
    First, there are no commercial stores in the park, which has became a problem in terms of equality of opportunity. Only silver cafes do business in the park, which in turn has taken away others' right of opportunity.

    Which sounds more natural, 1 or 2? When I thought of "with", it sounded awkward, so changed to "in terms of", but I'm not sure.
    1. which has became a problem with equality of opportunity
    2. which has became a problem in terms of equality of opportunity

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    Re: in terms of equality of opportunity

    The second one is better. (The first suggests that the problem is caused by equality of opportunity. Or something like that.)

    It is, unfortunately, not unusual that the government "solves" a problem that didn't exist and by doing so creates new problems.

    Maybe the members of the City Council need to find some hobbies. Or take some classes at night school.
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