one of the hallmarks of social life in this city

[alpacinou]

Hello to all,

Is this correct?

The gaping chasm between the haves and the have-nots is one of the hallmarks of social life in this city. On the one hand, you have a small minority of people who enjoy exceedingly high living standards and their lifestyle is reflected in their ostentatious display of wealth on Instagram. On the other hand, you have people trying to eke out a precarious existence on subsistence wages.


I am particularly concerned about the underlined parts but if there are other problems please let me know.

I would appreciate your suggestions to make it better.

The context is that I am writing about my city in formal register.

 

[GoesStation]

It's fine as written. If you want to tighten it a little, you can write between the haves and have-nots without changing the meaning.

 

[Rover_KE]

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