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    As you open the door of the villa

    Hello

    I am trying to describe a villa I saw last night for myself. I know you have not seen the villa but could you tell me if this sentence is correct?

    As you open the door of the villa, you see a spacious living room with a high ceiling. There are two chandeliers hanging over the main hall and a few paintings on the walls. There are a few windows around the living room. There is also a tall mirror in the corner. The villa is a duplex and there is a staircase in the middle of the living room which leads you to the bedrooms upstairs.
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    Re: As you open the door of the villa

    Are the living room and the main hall the same space?
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    Re: As you open the door of the villa

    It's not bad. I'm not sure why you've used the preposition around.

    I assume the mirror is in the living room but that's not completely clear. You might want to splice the third and fourth sentences together.

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    Re: As you open the door of the villa

    I have moved your thread.

    When you want your own writing to be edited or proofread, please post it here in Editing & Writing Topics.

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    Re: As you open the door of the villa

    In the middle of the living room, there is a staircase leading to the upstairs bedrooms.
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    Re: As you open the door of the villa

    Quote Originally Posted by alpacinoutd View Post
    Hello

    I am trying to describe a villa I saw last night for myself. I know you have not seen the villa, but could you tell me if this sentence is these sentences are correct?

    As you open the door of the villa, you see a spacious living room with a high ceiling. There are two chandeliers in the main hall and a few paintings on the walls. There are a few windows around the living room. There is also a tall mirror in the corner. The villa is a duplex, and there is a staircase in the middle of the living room which leads you to the bedrooms upstairs.
    It's hardly worth mentioning that there are windows. Also, I imagine that the place is much fancier than your description.

    Perhaps:

    The windows of the living room give the place an airy look.

    Why are certain phrases underlined?
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    Re: As you open the door of the villa

    Quote Originally Posted by alpacinoutd View Post
    a high ceiling
    You may call it a lofty ceiling.

    Quote Originally Posted by alpacinoutd View Post
    a tall mirror
    You may call it a full-length mirror.
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    Re: As you open the door of the villa

    Quote Originally Posted by Tarheel View Post

    I imagine that the place is much fancier than your description.
    Yes it was a very fancy place. Could you please tell me how I can make my description more fancy?

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    Re: As you open the door of the villa

    I'm having trouble picturing a staircase in the middle of the living room.

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    Re: As you open the door of the villa

    The OP may try to describe the classic furnishings, such as furniture, lighting, carpets, curtains, wallpaper etc.
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