Kevin looked at himself in the mirror

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Bassim

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Kevin looked at himself in the mirror and didn't like at all what he saw: a middle-aged man who had grown old before his time. Grey hair springing from his scalp; wrinkles around his eyes; his paunch only getting bigger. His work at the TV station was slowly killing him, and he would have no use of his fame if his health was ruined. You have to find another job, he thought. Better to be nothing but healthy than famous and sick.
 
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The second sentence is not a proper sentence- you could join it up to the previous one.
 

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Better, I think, would be:

Better to be unknown and healthy rather than famous and sick.
 

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Better to be a nobody and healthy, than famous and sick.
 
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