they started to become an engineer.

[keannu]

[FONT=&#48148]Secondly, I told them engineering theories repeatedly. That made they memorize basic theories naturally. Just saying theories is very boring, so I tried to tell them the principles relevant to their tasks. I kept telling them principles naturally, so they learned fundamental principles related to their job. When they learned basic principles, it aroused their interests in their work and they started to become an engineer.[/FONT]

It's hard to bear the Korean nuance in the underlined. Is it correct?

 

[Tarheel]

None of that is natural. Also, there is, in my humble opinion, no reason to be looking for Korean nuance in English.

 

[keannu]

Secondly, I told them engineering theories repeatedly. That made they memorize basic theories naturally. Just saying theories is very boring, so I tried to tell them the principles relevant to their tasks. I kept telling them principles naturally, so they learned fundamental principles related to their job. When they learned basic principles, it aroused their interests in their work and they started to become an engineer.

It's hard to bear the Korean nuance in the underlined. Is it correct?

1. Is one of "their" redundant or "necessary"?
it aroused their interests in their work
2. Is the correction better?
When they learned basic principles, it aroused their interests in their work and they started to become an engineer.
When they learned basic principles, it aroused their interests in their work and encouraged/motivated/inspired them to become an engineer.

 

[Tarheel]

I guess you mean by that first sentence that you explained engineering theories to them. And you repeated yourself to strengthen their memories.

 

[Tarheel]

I suggest that you use the word "try" (or one of its variants) only when it means something.

 

[Tarheel]

Learning basic principles aroused their interest in their work.
:-?

 

[keannu]

None of that is natural. Also, there is, in my humble opinion, there is no reason to be looking for Korean nuance in English.

I think the following three words are perfect both in Korean and English .

encouraged/motivated/inspired them to become an engineer.

 

[Tarheel]

I think you could use any of those, but you have to say engineers.

(Weren't they already motivated to become engineers because they wanted to make more money?)

I think encouraged works best.

 

[Tarheel]

Please don't start off with "Secondly" if nothing came before. It irritates us fussbudgets.
;-)

 

[keannu]

I think you could use any of those, but you have to say engineers.

(Weren't they already motivated to become engineers because they wanted to make more money?)

I think encouraged works best.

What about 'triggerred them to become engineers'? Does it sound awkward?

 

[Tarheel]

I thought "triggered" was a word you use to say somebody is upset about something.

 

[keannu]

I thought "triggered" was a word you use to say somebody is upset about something.

Before I thought 'trigger' had both positive and negative meanings. After referring to the definition below, I felt I'd better not use it.

https://www.dictionary.com/browse/trigger?s=t