for an Asian like me.

Status
Not open for further replies.

keannu

VIP Member
Joined
Dec 27, 2010
Member Type
Student or Learner
Native Language
Korean
Home Country
South Korea
Current Location
South Korea
At Deanstone Distillery, I could find the word, “Arkwright spinning machine.” Anciently, it was not a distillery,,,,,,
[FONT=&#48148]It was a very unique experience for an Asian like me. There I could find a way new experience. Likewise, travel is always pleasant for me as I can always learn new things.

Are the underlined parts correct?[/FONT]
 

Tarheel

VIP Member
Joined
Jun 16, 2014
Member Type
Interested in Language
Native Language
American English
Home Country
United States
Current Location
United States
Everything is wrong with this one except:

Travel is always pleasant for me as I always learn new things. (Revised.)

Maybe you could start with saying why you were at the distillery and where it is.
 

emsr2d2

Moderator
Staff member
Joined
Jul 28, 2009
Member Type
English Teacher
Native Language
British English
Home Country
UK
Current Location
UK
Anciently, it was not a distillery,,,,,,

1. Although "anciently" is a word, it's very rarely used. In fact, my immediate reaction was that it was wrong. It reminded me of a certain nameless famous person's "bigly".
2. Yet again, what is this bizarre string of commas supposed to be?
 

Tarheel

VIP Member
Joined
Jun 16, 2014
Member Type
Interested in Language
Native Language
American English
Home Country
United States
Current Location
United States
Perhaps:

I enjoyed my visit to the Deanstone Dillstillery. It was a brand new experience for me.
 
Last edited:

Tarheel

VIP Member
Joined
Jun 16, 2014
Member Type
Interested in Language
Native Language
American English
Home Country
United States
Current Location
United States
It was a very unique experience for an Asian like me. There I could find a way new experience. Likewise, travel is always pleasant for me as I can always learn new things.

I would start over. I wouldn't keep any of it.
 

keannu

VIP Member
Joined
Dec 27, 2010
Member Type
Student or Learner
Native Language
Korean
Home Country
South Korea
Current Location
South Korea
1. Although "anciently" is a word, it's very rarely used. In fact, my immediate reaction was that it was wrong. It reminded me of a certain nameless famous person's "bigly".
2. Yet again, what is this bizarre string of commas supposed to be?

The commas are a symbol of omitted parts inbetween to show a background sentence. I think I forgot to use only three commas instead.
 

emsr2d2

Moderator
Staff member
Joined
Jul 28, 2009
Member Type
English Teacher
Native Language
British English
Home Country
UK
Current Location
UK
You shouldn't be using commas at all. You are trying to create an ellipsis. An ellipsis consists of three dots (full stops) with a space at either end.

Someday, I will visit a ...
Someday, I will ... distillery.
 

keannu

VIP Member
Joined
Dec 27, 2010
Member Type
Student or Learner
Native Language
Korean
Home Country
South Korea
Current Location
South Korea
You shouldn't be using commas at all. You are trying to create an ellipsis. An ellipsis consists of three dots (full stops) with a space at either end.

Someday, I will visit a ...
Someday, I will ... distillery.

I'm sorry I forgot it. I think you taught me about this years ago.
My ",,,," is a bad habit I definitely need to break.
 

Tarheel

VIP Member
Joined
Jun 16, 2014
Member Type
Interested in Language
Native Language
American English
Home Country
United States
Current Location
United States
I sometimes use an ellipsis when there are a bunch more words in a sentence, and I don't want to type them. However, the other person knows what those words are. I do it most often in Bassim's threads. If after my suggested change the rest of the sentence remains the same I might not want to type all the words.
 

keannu

VIP Member
Joined
Dec 27, 2010
Member Type
Student or Learner
Native Language
Korean
Home Country
South Korea
Current Location
South Korea
1. Although "anciently" is a word, it's very rarely used. In fact, my immediate reaction was that it was wrong. It reminded me of a certain nameless famous person's "bigly".
2. Yet again, what is this bizarre string of commas supposed to be?

I meant "in ancient times" and I think "long ago" is a little bit different from it.
Can I use "in ancient times"?
 

Tarheel

VIP Member
Joined
Jun 16, 2014
Member Type
Interested in Language
Native Language
American English
Home Country
United States
Current Location
United States
I meant "in ancient times" and I think "long ago" is a little bit different from it.
I don't know why you think that.

Can I use "in ancient times"?

It is certainly possible, but if somebody says "In ancient times" I think In terms of centuries, maybe millennia.
 

keannu

VIP Member
Joined
Dec 27, 2010
Member Type
Student or Learner
Native Language
Korean
Home Country
South Korea
Current Location
South Korea

keannu

VIP Member
Joined
Dec 27, 2010
Member Type
Student or Learner
Native Language
Korean
Home Country
South Korea
Current Location
South Korea
I would start over. I wouldn't keep any of it.

I changed it like this, please go over it.

It was a very unique experience for an Asian like me. There I could find a way new experience. Likewise, travel is always pleasant for me as I can always learn new things.

=>It was a very unique experience for a foreigner from Asia like me. It was an extremely brand new experience for me.
As in this experience, travel is always pleasant for me as I can always learn new things.
 

Tarheel

VIP Member
Joined
Jun 16, 2014
Member Type
Interested in Language
Native Language
American English
Home Country
United States
Current Location
United States
You are right. The distillery started in the 18th century, not in ancient times.

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Deanston_distillery The Deanston Distillery started life in 1785 as a cotton mill designed by Sir Richard Arkwright,

Of course, I'm always right.
;-)

If you ever get a chance you might want to visit Paris and see the Eiffel Tower, the Louvre. and Notre Dame (while it's still standing). As for the USA, popular tourist attractions include Yellowstone Park and the Grand Canyon.
 
Last edited:

jutfrank

VIP Member
Joined
Mar 5, 2014
Member Type
English Teacher
Native Language
English
Home Country
England
Current Location
England
Here's a tip for you: It's a common error among Korean speakers to start sentences with There + clause.

Don't do that.
 

tedmc

VIP Member
Joined
Apr 16, 2014
Member Type
Interested in Language
Native Language
Chinese
Home Country
Malaysia
Current Location
Malaysia
You are right. The distillery started in 18 century, not in ancient times.

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Deanston_distillery
Deanston Distillery started life in 1785 as a
cotton mill designed by Sir Richard Arkwright,

You could write:
It was originally used as a cotton mill before it was converted into a distillery in the year...

It was a totally new experience for me, coming from Asia. This is what I like about travelling to foreign countries expecially those in the west. Being exposed to new environments and new cultures is enriching and exhilarating.
 

Tarheel

VIP Member
Joined
Jun 16, 2014
Member Type
Interested in Language
Native Language
American English
Home Country
United States
Current Location
United States
I changed it like this, please go over it.

It was a very unique experience for an Asian like me. There I could find a way new experience. Likewise, travel is always pleasant for me as I can always learn new things.

=>It was a very unique experience for a foreigner from Asia like me. It was an extremely brand new experience for me.
As in this experience, travel is always pleasant for me as I can always learn new things.

No. First, I detest very unique. All you have to say is It was a brand new experience for me. Then I enjoy traveling because I am always learning new things.

Finished!
 

tedmc

VIP Member
Joined
Apr 16, 2014
Member Type
Interested in Language
Native Language
Chinese
Home Country
Malaysia
Current Location
Malaysia
Here's a tip for you: It's a common error among Korean speakers to start sentences with There + clause.

Don't do that.

It is common in Chinese and Malay too.
 
Status
Not open for further replies.
Top