A phone-call for delivery

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keannu

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[FONT=&#48148]And also delivery app is a rising/emerging business in Korea. When a customer orders a food in/on a smart phone app, it automatically links a delivery driver to the restaurant. When the food is ready in the restaurant, the driver visits the restaurant and picks it up, and delivers it to the customer. Everything is automatically done on the internet. A phone-call for delivery is unnecessary.[/FONT]


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And also delivery app is a rising/emerging business in Korea. When a customer orders a food in/on a smart phone app, it automatically links a delivery driver to the restaurant. When the food is ready in the restaurant, the driver visits the restaurant and picks it up, and delivers it to the customer. Everything is automatically done on the internet. A phone-call for delivery is unnecessary.


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I don't think you can call delivery apps a business. I'd say something like "Delivery apps are increasing in Korea".
Say "When a customer orders food by app/on an app ..."
I'd say "Ordering by phone is unnecessary."

The third sentence is unnecessarily wordy, given that you've already mentioned the restaurant and the driver. Try "When the food is ready, the driver picks it up and delivers it to the customer."
 

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When you start a sentence with "And" that way I always wonder what came before.

Perhaps:

Delivery apps are increasing in use in Korea.
 

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When you start a sentence with "And" that way I always wonder what came before.

If I put the background sentence before it, I'm afraid you would double answer it, as it is already in another thread.
 

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