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    Summer trip

    Good morning guys. I've just written this article about my last summer trip.
    Could you kindly revise my writing please?


    Hello guys. here I am, in a cold and wet winter afternoon, comfortably sitting in front of my computer, I decided then to tell and share my emotions of my marvelous summer vacation in Portugal. More precisely, the visit of a historical wine cellar in Vila Nova de Gaia. It all started when my friends and I ( strongly enthusiastic about wine ) while surfing the web, looking for the classic phrase “ best things to do in Porto,” we finally found an interesting tour guide. The visit of “Casa Ramos Pinto,” that’s the name of this late 800’s vinho do Porto cellar. Since, neither of us ever tasted this product and also fascinated by the ancient history of the cellar, we got the tickets. The next day, after a nice walk in the sun through the streets of the city, we agreed to meet in the little square, next to the Dom Luis I bridge, where we had the pleasure to know our guide for the tour. Pedro, a young friendly Portuguese guy who was very knowledgeable, answering all the questions and also telling some jokes to make the tour funny and enjoyable. Well, let’s describe a bit the cellar… Founded by Adriano Ramos Pinto in 1880, Casa Ramos Pinto quickly became famous, at the time, for its innovative and enterprising strategy. It started operating on the Brazilian market in the early 20th century, exporting a huge quantity of wine to South America. Through the years, it did not fail to improve, that’s why now this brand stands for quality and reliability. Once inside the yellow building, one thing that caught my eyes were those funny posters commissioned to famous painters by the owner. Let’s say this marketing strategy at that time was extravagant but worthy. I tasted three styles of Port wine. White, Ruby and Tawny.
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    Re: Summer trip

    Quote Originally Posted by lucakun View Post
    Good morning guys. I've just written this article about my last summer trip.
    Could you kindly revise my writing please?


    Hello guys. Here I am, in on a cold and wet winter afternoon, but comfortably sitting in front of my computer, So, I have decided then to tell and share my emotions of about my marvelous summer vacation in Portugal. More precisely, the visit of to a historical wine cellar in Vila Nova de Gaia. It all started when my friends and I ( strongly enthusiastic about wine ) while surfing the web, looking for the classic phrase ¬“ best things to do in Porto,¬” we finally found an interesting tour guide. The visit of ¬“Casa Ramos Pinto,¬” that¬’s the name of this late 800¬’s vinho do Porto cellar. Since, neither none of us ever tasted this product and also fascinated by the ancient history of the cellar, we got the tickets. The next day, after a nice walk in the sun through the streets of the city, we agreed decided to meet in the little square, next to the Dom Luis I bridge, where we had the pleasure to know meet our guide for the tour. Pedro, a young friendly Portuguese guy who was very knowledgeable, answering all the our questions and also telling some jokes to make the tour funny humorous and enjoyable. Well, let¬’s describe a bit the cellar¬… Founded by Adriano Ramos Pinto in 1880, Casa Ramos Pinto quickly became famous, at the time, for its innovative and enterprising strategy. It started operating on the Brazilian market in the early 20th century, exporting a huge quantity of wine to South America. Through the years, it did not fail to improve, that¬’s why now this brand stands for quality and reliability (? what makes wine reliable?). Once inside the yellow (Is the color important?) building, one thing that caught my eyes eye were was those funny posters commissioned to famous painters by the owner. Let¬’s say this marketing strategy at that time was extravagant but worthy. I tasted three styles of Port wine. White, Ruby and Tawny.
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    Re: Summer trip

    Quote Originally Posted by lucakun View Post
    Good morning, guys. I've just written this article about my last summer trip.
    Could you kindly revise review/correct my writing it please?


    Hello guys.

    Here I am, in on a cold and wet winter afternoon, comfortably sitting comfortably in front of my computer.

    I have decided then to tell and share my emotions of you about my marvellous summer vacation in Portugal.

    More precisely, the visit of to a historical wine cellar in Vila Nova de Gaia.

    It all started when my friends and I (strongly enthusiastic about wine), while surfing searching the web (no comma here) looking for the classic phrase “best things to do in Porto", we finally found an interesting tour guide. (A tour guide is someone who leads you on a tour. I'm not sure that's what you mean.)

    The It was a visit of to “Casa Ramos Pinto" (that’s the name of this late 1800’s vinho do Porto cellar).

    Since (no comma here) neither of us had ever tasted this product and we were also fascinated by the ancient history of the cellar, we got the tickets.

    The next day, after a nice walk in the sun through the streets of the city, we agreed to meet in the little square (no comma here) next to the Dom Luis I bridge, where we had the pleasure to know of meeting our guide for the tour, Pedro.

    Pedro was a young, friendly Portuguese guy who was very knowledgeable, answering all the our questions and also telling some jokes to make the tour funny and enjoyable.

    Well, let’s Now I will describe a bit the cellar a bit.

    Founded by Adriano Ramos Pinto in 1880, Casa Ramos Pinto quickly became famous , at the time, for its innovative and enterprising strategy. I'm not sure what the underlined part means.

    It started operating on the Brazilian market in the early 20th century, exporting a huge quantity of wine to South America.

    Through the years, it did not fail to improve; that’s why now this brand now stands for quality and reliability.

    Once inside the yellow building, one thing that caught my eyes eye were was those some funny posters by famous painters, commissioned to famous painters by the owner.

    Let’s say this marketing strategy at that time was extravagant but worthy.

    I tasted three styles of port wine. - white, ruby and tawny.
    See my corrections (in red) and my comments (in blue) above. I have put each sentence on its own line just to make it easier to read.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: Summer trip

    I have a question. Did you travel to Portugal to see a wine cellar?

    Did the wine cellar start operating in the first century?

    (Say: "Since neither of us had ever tasted that product ....")

    Innovative and enterprising marketing ....

    It shipped the product (wine) to Brazil.

    What does "it did not fail to improve" mean?
    Last edited by Tarheel; 01-Mar-2020 at 15:21. Reason: Fix text
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    Re: Summer trip

    Quote Originally Posted by Tarheel View Post
    Did the wine cellar start operating in the first century?
    The later statement "Founded in 1880" shows that "800s" was a typo.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: Summer trip

    I've just written this article about my last summer trip.

    Can I assume by that that you won't be going on another one?
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    Re: Summer trip

    Could you make paragraphs next time?
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    Re: Summer trip

    Quote Originally Posted by Tarheel View Post
    I've just written this article about my last summer trip.

    Can I assume by that that you won't be going on another one?
    Why?

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    Quote Originally Posted by Tarheel View Post
    Could you make paragraphs next time?
    I undestand.

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    If somebody says it's their last one it's a reasonable assumption that there won't be another.

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