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    SaudHaq is offline Newbie
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    Post Regarding my Medical insurance.

    Dear Sir,

    How are you doing?

    I would like to inform you that my and my family's medical insurance has been closed by my last company.

    Once they accepted and approved my iqama transfer request, they closed all our medical insurance.

    So now me and my family are without medical insurance.

    Could you please sir, help me out in this matter?

    Thank you.

    Regards,
    Saud

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    Re: Regarding my Medical insurance.

    Quote Originally Posted by SaudHaq View Post
    Dear Sir,

    How are you doing? (Inappropriate in a formal letter)

    I would like to inform you that my and my family's medical insurance has been closed cancelled by my last company employer.

    Once they accepted and approved my iqama transfer request, they closed cancelled all our medical insurance.

    So Consequently, now me and my family we are now without medical insurance.

    Could you please sir, help me out in this matter?

    Thank you.

    Regards,

    Yours faithfully

    Saud + surname
    Welcome to the forum.

    Please note my corrections above. If you start a letter with "Dear Sir", you should finish with "Yours faithfully". If you start with "Dear + name", end with "Yours sincerely". Are you certain that the person you are writing to is male? If so, but you don't know his name, "Dear Sir" is OK. If you're not sure of their gender, use "Dear Sir/Madam" or "To Whom It May Concern" (although this isn't used much these days). In my opinion, you're more likely to get help if you find out the person's name and address the letter to them personally, ie "Dear Mr Jones/Dear Ms Jackson".

    I have no idea what an "iagma transfer request" is, so I have left it as it is.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: Regarding my Medical insurance.

    All Em's suggestions are good. Another change you might make: Change I would like to inform you that my and my family's medical insurance . . . . to I write to inform you that my family medical insurance . . .

    It's more concise and means the same thing. Remember: In business letters, short sentences are better than long ones.
    I'm not a teacher. I speak American English. I've tutored writing at the University of Southern Maine and have done a good deal of copy editing and writing, occasionally for publication.

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    Re: Regarding my Medical insurance.

    Who are you writing to and what help do you want?
    I am not a teacher or a native speaker.

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