"A CATASTROPHIC PANDEMIC"

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Nature is boundless, nobody can regret
the natural blunder due to badness we
made, we revise our devout verses, when
the world stuck in any disaster. Likewise
pandemics are occuring in ages, having a
full time period till cure, these catastrophe
are bound box until our effective habits
diverse to wrong direction. Similarly one
harmful disease not only kills animality,
but also economy and push the world in
the ditch of sorrows and difficulties, we
call it:
"A CATASTROPHIC PANDEMIC".

Foremost of 2020 a new virus was
reported called as: "CORONA VIRUS"
caused by severe accute respiratory
syndrome corona virus 2 ( SARS-COV2).
The first case was coded on Dec, 2019 in
Wuhan, China later it accelerated about
200 countries in the world. Nowadays
doctors and scientists told the symptoms
of virus like tiredness, fever, cough and
breathing problems could be the purpose
of virus. It is spreading from human transformation relating touching to the
vapours of unwell person. World Health
Organization awoke on 11 March 2020
and declared it as "PANDEMIC".

Prevention is better than cure, we must
wash our hands time by time with any
soap or hand washer and use the
sanitizer, but also intake the vitamin C as
much as possible. Relevantly without
cleanliness we are porous, safety is to get
good immune system, which works to
survive from virus. People are in hysteria,
and are not contributing to government
orders. They must keep calm and stay
home as per orders because scientists of
world are making vaccine and sacrificing
their hours of life to protect the world.

The God is reminding us our limits,
significance of humanity and justifies that
He is only the everlasting creator of this
universe (ALLAH). Denoting us the path of
Mankind, Love and Peace which every
religion lead. People in every country must
stand side by side to make the world
decent again! A world with peace and
harmony, a world with sign of liberty, a
world without terror skies, a beautiful world, colorful world.
 

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People in every country must stand side by side ....

Well, there goes social distancing.
;-)
 

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I can't help but wonder
What you mean by natural blunder.
 

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Nature is boundless, nobody can regret the natural blunder due to badness we made, we revise our devout verses, when the world stuck in any disaster. Likewise (missing punctuation) pandemics are occuring in ages, having a full time period till cure, these [STRIKE]catastrophe[/STRIKE] are bound box until our effective habits diverse to wrong direction. Similarly (missing punctuation) one harmful disease not only kills animality, but also (missing article) economy and push the world in the ditch of sorrows and difficulties, we call it: "A CATASTROPHIC PANDEMIC".

I'm really not sure where to start. There are, unfortunately, so many errors in your piece (and what you're trying to say is so unclear) that it's almost impossible to correct. I have taken just the first paragraph, laid it out properly, marked punctuation errors in red and underlined all the words that are incorrect or unclear.

I suspect you might have used something like Google Translate - if that's what you did, you will have now learned that it produces nonsense the longer the piece. If you didn't use an online translation tool, then you are simply trying to write English of a much higher level than you are capable of.
 

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I'm really not sure where to start. There are, unfortunately, so many errors in your piece (and what you're trying to say is so unclear) that it's almost impossible to correct. I have taken just the first paragraph, laid it out properly, marked punctuation errors in red and underlined all the words that are incorrect or unclear.

I suspect you might have used something like Google Translate - if that's what you did, you will have now learned that it produces nonsense the longer the piece. If you didn't use an online translation tool, then you are simply trying to write English of a much higher level than you are capable of.

I think it semms few punctuation mistakes only and I have rewised it myself.... so it doesn't mean that my whole pieece is incomplete.
And I write these type of articles by using all tenses randomly, it is just my style of writing.
 

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[STRIKE]I think[/STRIKE] It [STRIKE]semms[/STRIKE] seems I made only a few punctuation mistakes [STRIKE]only[/STRIKE] and I have [STRIKE]rewised[/STRIKE] revised it myself, so it doesn't mean that my whole [STRIKE]pieece[/STRIKE] piece is incomplete.

I have no idea what you mean by "I have revised it myself".
I didn't suggest your piece was incomplete. I said it contained a lot of errors.


[STRIKE]And[/STRIKE] I write these type of articles by using all tenses randomly; it is just my style of writing.
The tenses are the least of your problems.

Please note my corrections (in red) and comments (in blue) above.

There were eight punctuation errors - that's quite a lot in a short paragraph. However, all the underlined parts have errors and those errors aren't all to do with tenses. Your piece is, unfortunately, incomprehensible. I stand by what I said - I think you are trying to write English of a level you're not yet capable of.
 

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What do you mean by "using tenses randomly"?
 

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I rather like the part about the world sliding into a ditch of sorrows.

Creativity can be good if it's effective. But if you invent words and phrases and nobody can understand what you're saying that's another story.
 

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I write these type of articles by using all tenses randomly, it is just my style of writing.

Now that's what I call an original style.
 

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Junaid, rather than trying to be creative, I suggest that you figure out what you want to say and say that. And use simple, easy to understand English. And avoid words like animality and phrases likr terror skies. I suggest that you write simpler, easier to understand sentences.
 
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