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As I am creating the trailer for my novel, but I am not sure the grammar problem.
Is there anyone who can help me to check the grammar errors? Thank you very much!
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Since a month ago, her dream is connected with a vampire
On her first day of school, a very mysterious guy has entered her life
but she doesn’t know that he is...
Vampires, witches, werewolves
All supernatural are existing in the world
She wants to run away from those crazy things
However, she has no idea how special she is
Until she found out all the secrets
She realised that she cannot escape the destiny
Falling in love with a vampire makes her...
He pretended not to know her feelings for him
but in deep down, he has known she is so important to him
Dangerous make them feel restless,
but they still want to fight
For love, For peace, For hope
At the same time, they need to face up to their fears
Take the risk of dying in their life
In the end, what do they have to lose for fighting the darkness?
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Last edited by carmenwong; 26-May-2020 at 10:14.
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Thanks for your correction. As I will add those sentences to the video, but I am not planning to put punctuation. Thus, I didn't add full stop at the end of each sentence. Some sentences add comma and ellipsis just for easier understanding. I should explain this problem at the beginning on the post. Sorry for the inconvenience![]()
He can't be plural. He can be a vampire, but not vampires. Also, is it possible to be all three?he is...
Vampires, witches, werewolves
Last edited by emsr2d2; 26-May-2020 at 16:12. Reason: Fixed typo
Thank you for your question.
As I will add those sentences and a short film to the video, some sentences are not coherent.
After showing the sentence of "but she doesn't know that he is...", a film clip will show on the screen. Then, "Vampires, witches, werewolves" will be used for the next film clip. It's just like some short sentences on a film trailer.
Last edited by emsr2d2; 26-May-2020 at 16:12. Reason: Fixed typo in quote
Since a month ago, her dream is connected with a vampire
For the past month, a vampire has been haunting her in her dreams.
On her first day of school, a very mysterious guyhasentered her life
but she doesn’t didn't know that he is...
Vampires, witches, werewolves
a supernatural being
All supernatural are existing in the world
The supernatural exists in the/this word.
She wants to run away from those crazy things
However, she has no idea how special she is
Until she found out all the secrets
She realised that she cannot escape the destiny
Falling in love with a vampire makes her...
He pretended not to know her feelings for him
butindeep down, hehas knownknows she is so important to him
The dangerousmakes them feel restless,
but they still want to fight on.
What is the idea of writing in short lines and not in a paragraph(s)?
You have jumbled up the tenses. How come?
Last edited by probus; 29-May-2020 at 04:55. Reason: Fix typo
I am not a teacher or a native speaker.
Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.