bonkiteng
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Hi, I have always used past tense in stories, so I'd love to know if there're any mistakes in this present-tense story. Thank you in advance!
Topic: It's not Zack's Day
[FONT="]Zack is going on a date with Lucy. When he finally arrives at the cafe’s gate, he suddenly realizes he left the water boiling! “Oh no!” He thinks, “If I keep the stove on, maybe the house will catch fire!” He wants to go back to turn off the gas, but he scares that his girlfriend will be angry at him being late for the date and break up with him. He is so nervous that he is biting his nails. A few minutes later, Zack decides to go back home first. He calls his girlfriend, “H-Hey Lucy, sorry, but can you wait for me a bit longer? I left the water boiling!” Lucy shouts, “What!? That is bad! Quickly go back to your home and turn off the stove!” At his fastest speed, Zack rushes back to his home, only to find out his house is already on fire, and the firefighters are trying to put it out. Although they succeed in the end, all Zack’s properties turn into ashes. Thankfully, none of his neighbors gets hurt. After this tragic incident, his girlfriend says, “Well, at least you are still alive and no one gets hurt!”[/FONT]
Topic: It's not Zack's Day
[FONT="]Zack is going on a date with Lucy. When he finally arrives at the cafe’s gate, he suddenly realizes he left the water boiling! “Oh no!” He thinks, “If I keep the stove on, maybe the house will catch fire!” He wants to go back to turn off the gas, but he scares that his girlfriend will be angry at him being late for the date and break up with him. He is so nervous that he is biting his nails. A few minutes later, Zack decides to go back home first. He calls his girlfriend, “H-Hey Lucy, sorry, but can you wait for me a bit longer? I left the water boiling!” Lucy shouts, “What!? That is bad! Quickly go back to your home and turn off the stove!” At his fastest speed, Zack rushes back to his home, only to find out his house is already on fire, and the firefighters are trying to put it out. Although they succeed in the end, all Zack’s properties turn into ashes. Thankfully, none of his neighbors gets hurt. After this tragic incident, his girlfriend says, “Well, at least you are still alive and no one gets hurt!”[/FONT]