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    Lightbulb After four long months, I went to the place that tied to my memory

    Are there any mistakes in this writing? How can I make it more natural?



    After four long months, I went to the place that is tied to my memory to find the inspiration for living anew. However, with a lot of frustration, I had to return home finally. Life has stopped today in the shadow of sadness!
    Last edited by Ador; 29-May-2020 at 21:04.

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    Re: After four long months, I went to the place that tied to my memory

    I wouldn't worry about naturalness at the moment. The problem here is coherence. It doesn't make much sense.

    Explain what you mean by the parts I've highlighted in red.

    Quote Originally Posted by Ador View Post
    After four long months, I went to the place that is tied to my memory to find the inspiration for living anew. However, with a lot of frustration, I had to return home finally. Life has stopped today in the shadow of sadness!
    Also, tell us what this text's purpose is. Is it part of a longer text? What? Who are you writing for?

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    Re: After four long months, I went to the place that tied to my memory

    Quote Originally Posted by jutfrank View Post
    I wouldn't worry about naturalness at the moment. The problem here is coherence. It doesn't make much sense.

    Explain what you mean by the parts I've highlighted in red.



    Also, tell us what this text's purpose is. Is it part of a longer text? What? Who are you writing for?
    ▪ the place that is tied to my memory: I grew up in that place that's why I wrote tied to my memory.

    ▪ living anew: I was going stir-crazy staying my home for almost 4 months lockdown. So to kill my boredom, I went to my uncle's house after hearing the decision of withdrawing lockdown.

    ▪ in the shadow of sadness!: I went to my uncle's house to kill my boredom but I had to return home because of their ruling child. He made me bored stiff.
    Last edited by Ador; 30-May-2020 at 11:04.

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