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    EASIER SAID THAN DONE

    I wrote this story to find out my mistakes in;



    1. The usage of tenses.
    2. The usage of vocabulary
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    1. The mourners started stepping towards the exit gate of the graveyard after attending the funeral services of someone named Jackson. Taking care the sanctity of the place, most of them walked silently. A few of them, lowering their voices, discussed the qualities Jackson possessed as a human being.

    2. Jackson’s coworker spoke softly, “he was very cooperative and was always ready to help his associates.”

    3. “He loved my careful driving and often gave me cash reward.”Jackson’s driver said in Jackson’s praise.

    4. “He was such a thorough gentleman that he never reprimanded me even if I would take leave without his prior approval.” Jackson’s manservant put his share into the discussion.

    5. Patrick, one of Jackson’s neighbors was very vocal in describing his character. “The deceased had many qualities but to me his patience at the time of disagreeable occasions was exceptional. His quality to control his anger was matchless. I always found him cool and composed. I think, if we adopt these qualities, we can make our society more viable. Disputes, tensions and hatred can easily be avoided if we follow the qualities of the deceased in our lives.” He finished. Mourners around him appreciated his views.

    6. Conversing with one another the mourners reached the exit gate of the graveyard.

    7. They almost crowded the gate since it being not wide enough for them to pass through it easily unless they did it one at a time.

    8. In an attempt to go first, one of the mourners, unintentionally, struck Patrick with his shoulder. Without wasting time, Patrick grabbed his shirt’s collar and pushed him badly. He ceaselessly abused him. Some of them hurriedly moved forward to try to keep Patrick calm and made way for Patrick to go first, which he did with a casual gait.

    9. They all had just heard him preaching about the importance of patience. One of the mourners witnessing this, whispered, “easier said than done” with a meaningful smile.

    THE END

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    Re: EASIER SAID THAN DONE

    Quote Originally Posted by hatimhussain View Post
    I wrote this story to find out my mistakes in;



    1. The usage of tenses.
    2. The usage of vocabulary
    3. Orderliness



    Please guide me.


    1. The mourners started stepping walking towards the exit gate of the graveyard after attending the funeral services of someone named Jackson. Taking care of the sanctity of the place, most of them walked silently. A few of them lowering their voices softly/in hushed tones discussed the qualities (virtues) Jackson possessed as a human being.

    2. Jackson’s coworker spoke softly, “he was very cooperative and was always ready to help his associates.”

    3. “He loved my careful driving and often gave me cash rewards. ”Jackson’s driver said in praise of Jackson’s praise.

    4. “He was such a thorough gentleman that he never reprimanded me even if I would take took leave without his prior approval.” Jackson’s manservant put his share chipped in into the discussion.

    5. Patrick, one of Jackson’s neighbors was very vocal in describing his character. “The deceased had many qualities but to me his patience at the a time of disagreeable occasions disagreement was exceptional. His quality to control his anger was matchless. I always found him cool and composed. I think, if we adopt these qualities, we can make our society more viable harmonious. Disputes, tensions and hatred can easily be avoided if we follow (adopt) the qualities of the deceased in our lives.” He finished ended his speech. Mourners around him appreciated his views.

    6. Conversing with one another Carrying on with their conversations, the mourners walked until they reached the exit gate of the graveyard.

    7. They almost crowded thronged the gate since it being not wide enough for them to pass go through it easily unless they did it one at a time moved in single file.

    8. In an attempt to go first, one of the mourners unintentionally struckshoved Patrick with his shoulder. Without wasting time, Patrick immediately grabbed his shirt’s collar him by the shirt collar and pushed him badly away. He ceaselessly abused scolded him. Some of them hurriedly moved forward to try to keep intervened to calm Patrick calm down and made way for let Patrick to go first, which he did with a casual gait.

    9. They all had just heard him preaching about the importance of patience. One of the mourners who had been witnessing this, whispered, “easier said than done(He does not practise what he preaches/He doesn't walk the talk) with a meaningful snide smile.

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    I am not a teacher or a native speaker.

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    Re: EASIER SAID THAN DONE

    tedmc, every time I write on this forum I feel as if I have written a flawless piece of writing this time. But when I see those red colored corrections, I realize I need a lot to improve my writing. However, I do feel a sense of satisfaction that in between those red colored corrections I find some black colored materials, which makes me feel that my piece of writing is not a complete trash. I have been seriously learning through these corrections made by you all. Thank you.

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    Hatim
    I am learning from doing the editing too. I do miss out things that need correcting and over-edit things sometimes. I am striving to minimise them. Most of my "corrections" are more on the choice of words which I thought could be better, not that the originals are not correct.
    I am not a teacher or a native speaker.

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    tedmc, by your above comments I feel reassured.

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    Re: EASIER SAID THAN DONE

    I would use complete gentleman rather than thorough gentleman.

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    Tdol, the Google dictionary gives the following meaning of "thorough".

    complete with regard to every detail; not superficial or partial.

    So please guide me why would you replace "thorough" with "complete"?.

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    Re: EASIER SAID THAN DONE

    Quote Originally Posted by hatimhussain View Post
    Tdol, the Google dictionary gives the following meaning of "thorough".

    complete with regard to every detail; not superficial or partial.

    So please guide me why would you replace "thorough" with "complete"?.
    I think what you wanted to say was that Jackson was very much a gentleman (complete) as he was a kind and forgiving person rather than a "thorough person" (paying attention to details). You can also say that he is a "true gentlemen".
    I am not a teacher or a native speaker.

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    Re: EASIER SAID THAN DONE

    A complete gentleman = a perfect/ideal one, though Ted's suggestion of true also works. The meaning of thorough works, but it doesn't collocate for me.

    Also, it was a suggestion rather than a correction.

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    Re: EASIER SAID THAN DONE

    I would use either "a perfect gentleman" or "an absolute gentleman".

    You might hear "He's an absolute gent!" in some variants/dialects. I particularly associate it with East End/Cockney accents.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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