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    whic one is the best way to express.

    "They reported significantly inreased 1-year mortlaity in patients with periprocedural CK-MB elevation eventhough who had successful angiographic result"




    "they reported a significantly increased 1-year mortality in patients with periprocedural CK-MB elevation despite angiographic success."






    is there any differences in terms of meaning, which one would you preffer if you were instead of me.



    regards








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    Re: whic one is the best way to express.

    Quote Originally Posted by drhy View Post
    "They reported significantly inreased 1-year mortlaity in patients with periprocedural CK-MB elevation eventhough who had successful angiographic result"




    "they reported a significantly increased 1-year mortality in patients with periprocedural CK-MB elevation despite angiographic success."






    is there any differences in terms of meaning, which one would you preffer if you were instead of me.



    regards






    Neither of them are correct:

    "They reported significantly inreased 1-year mortlaity in patients with periprocedural CK-MB elevation, even those who had a successful angiographic result."

    "They reported a significantly increased 1-year mortality in patients with periprocedural CK-MB elevation, despite angiographic success."

    I have corrected the grammar in both. I would choose the first one because the second seems to focus on the success of the procedure rather than the result.



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    Re: whic one is the best way to express.

    thanks a lot

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    Re: whic one is the best way to express.

    Nothing to add to what Mike wrote, but I have one tiny point drhy: "if you were instead of me" should be "if you were in my place" (with stress on the "my").

    b

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    Re: whic one is the best way to express.

    Quote Originally Posted by drhy View Post
    thanks a lot
    You're welcome, drhy.

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