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    I have recently completed my undergraduate education

    Hey, I am writing my statement of purpose and I have really limited word. So in one sentence, I should say I have just graduated from X department and I was the top student in the department. I write this but it sounds like weird. Can you help me?
    "I have recently completed my undergraduate education in the Department of X at Y University as the top student."
    Thanks in advance for your help.

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    Re: I have recently completed my undergraduate education

    Quote Originally Posted by Gissem View Post
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    Hello Gissem, and welcome to the forum.
    Note that while "Hey" may be okay among friends or people on familiar terms, it is not suitable here. Use "hello" if necessary, or even better, just ask your question without any introduction.

    Quote Originally Posted by Gissem View Post
    I am writing my statement of purpose, and I have really limited vocabulary. word. So in one sentence, I should say I have just graduated from X department and I was the top student in the department. I write this, but it sounds like weird. Can you help me?
    "I have recently completed my undergraduate education in the Department of X at Y University, and I was as the top student in my class/batch."
    Thanks in advance for your help.
    See above. Consider also specifying your degree. For example, "I recently graduated with a Bachelor of Arts from the Department of History at Oldham University".
    Let us know if you need further help with your statement of purpose.
    Last edited by emsr2d2; 27-Jul-2020 at 10:13. Reason: Made title match new original

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    Re: I have recently completed my undergraduate education

    Quote Originally Posted by teechar View Post
    Hello Gissem, and welcome to the forum.
    Note that while "Hey" may be okay among friends or people on familiar terms, it is not suitable here. Use "hello" if necessary, or even better, just ask your question without any introduction.


    See above. Consider also specifying your degree. For example, "I recently graduated with a Bachelor of Arts from the Department of History at Oldham University".
    Let us know if you need further help with your statement of purpose.
    Thank you for your advice and help :) I don't want to say "I was the top student" as a separate sentence. I want to combine these 2 info. Can you please help me in this way?
    "I have recently completed my Bachelor of Science in Electronics Engineering at X University as the top student in the department." How is it? By the way, I don't understand the "specifying degree" issue.
    Last edited by emsr2d2; 27-Jul-2020 at 10:13. Reason: Made title match new original

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    #4

    Re: Can you please check and edit my sentence?

    Try:

    I recently completed my Bachelor of Science in electronics engineering at X University as the stop student in my class.

    Look up specify. www.Dictionary.com
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    #5

    Re: I have recently completed my undergraduate education

    I think it is okay for Electronics Engineering to be capitalized as it is part of the name of the degree.
    Last edited by emsr2d2; 27-Jul-2020 at 10:13. Reason: Made title match new original
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    Re: I have recently completed my undergraduate education

    It would sound more natural to me as "electronic engineering", but if the actual name of that degree was "electronics engineering", then don't change it.
    Last edited by emsr2d2; 27-Jul-2020 at 10:14. Reason: Made title match new original

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    #7

    Re: I have recently completed my undergraduate education

    Gissem, I have changed your thread title. Titles should be unique, relevant to the thread and include some/all of the words/phrases you are asking us about. Titles such as "Please check my sentence" are useless.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    #8

    Re: I have recently completed my undergraduate education

    Electronics is the noun. The adjective is electronic, so it should be electronic engineering.
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