revise sentence from a book and make a new sentence

[Polyester]

I read a book and found a sentence that I want to rewrite. Is the following possible?

Book: Orange is the new black
Author: Piper Kerman

Original:If I pleaded guilty, make no mistake, I was going to prison, but for a much shorter time.

My version:I don't want to go to work for a much longer time. If I had big money, I would quit my work.

 

[teechar]

1- What's the connection between those two?
2- Does "prison" mean "work"?
3- The first says nothing about money, so why did you decide to talk about that?

 

[GoesStation]

Thanks for providing the author and title. Always capitalize the main words of book titles. This is simple when the book is in front of you: copy each letter of the title exactly as it appears in the book.

 

[Polyester]

1- What's the connection between those two?
2- Does "prison" mean "work"?
3- The first says nothing about money, so why did you decide to talk about that?

Hi teechar,

I will combine to an answer for above-mentioned three questions.

I try to understand the original sentence. To rewrite a new version sentence. I need to change the words and match the original sentence meaning.

 

[emsr2d2]

Hi, teechar.

I will combine [STRIKE]to an[/STRIKE] my answers [STRIKE]for[/STRIKE] to the [STRIKE]above-mentioned[/STRIKE] three questions above.

I try to understand the original sentence. To rewrite it and create a new version, [STRIKE]sentence.[/STRIKE] I need to change the words and match the meaning of the original sentence. [STRIKE]meaning.[/STRIKE]

Note my corrections above.

 

[Charlie Bernstein]

I read a book and found a sentence that I want to rewrite. Is the following possible?

Book: Orange Is the New Black

Book titles are usually in italics.

Author: Piper Kerman

Original: [space after colons] If I pleaded guilty, make no mistake, I was going to prison, but for a much shorter time.

My version: [space after colons] I don't want to [STRIKE]go to[/STRIKE] work for [STRIKE]a[/STRIKE] much longer [STRIKE]time[/STRIKE]. If I had a lot of money, I would quit my job.

It looks like you want to know whether you used If correctly. You did.

You did not need to show the book quote. It's confusing.

 

[teechar]

Polyester, the meanings don't match.
In case you didn't know, plead guilty means admit (in a court of law) to an accusation.

 

[Polyester]

Polyester, the meanings don't match.
In case you didn't know, plead guilty means admit (in a court of law) to an accusation.

So, I may not able to handle this sentence.

 

[Rover_KE]

So[no comma here] I may not be able to handle this sentence.

We've been trying to tell you that ever since you started posting threads of this nature. It's a pointless exercise.

 

[Polyester]

We've been trying to tell you that ever since you started posting threads of this nature. It's a pointless exercise.

I have been trying to do tell you that I am never giving up whatever I posted wrong sentences or not.

 

[emsr2d2]

I have been trying to [STRIKE]do[/STRIKE] tell you that I am never giving up, [STRIKE]whatever[/STRIKE] whether I [STRIKE]posted[/STRIKE] post [STRIKE]wrong[/STRIKE] sentences with errors or not.

Note my corrections above. We're not suggesting you give up trying to learn English. We're saying that this bizarre method you are currently using is completely ineffective. You seem to have misunderstood what "rewrite" means. You keep giving us sentences you found in a book and then writing a sentence that bears almost no resemblance to the original, yet calling it a rewrite.

Using your method, this would be a rewrite:
Original: I have a dog that is black and is overweight.
My version: I have two bicycles that are green and very light.

Unfortunately, that is not a rewrite. That is just a sentence with roughly the same structure but a completely different meaning.

Here's an example of a rewrite:
Original: I have a dog that is black and is overweight.
My version: I have a fat, black dog.

 

[Polyester]

Understood. Now, it's clear.

 

[Rover_KE]

Understood. Now, it's clear.

Are you sure? I made the same point the first time you tried this exercise [link], when I wrote

You have not rewritten the original sentence, Polyester, but you've written a completely different, ungrammatical one. Consider this sentence:

My decorator, Matt Phinnish, painted my kitchen walls yesterday.

This is one way to rewrite it:

Yesterday, Matt Phinnish, my decorator, painted the walls of my kitchen.

 

[probus]

Rover, Matt Phinish is your best since the lion tamer Claude Johnson.:-D

 

[Rover_KE]

Thank you. I'm here all week.:-D