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    #1

    my palm was bathed

    Hello,

    Have I used "palm" and "bathe" correctly in this sentence?

    What do you think about it?

    She had shot herself. I grabbed her body, my palm was bathed in her blood.

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    #2

    Re: my palm was bathed

    Just the one hand? Probably more likely your hands were covered in her blood.

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    #3

    Re: my palm was bathed

    Quote Originally Posted by SoothingDave View Post
    Just the one hand? Probably more likely your hands were covered in her blood.
    I want to see if I can use palm. So, what about this?

    She had shot herself. I grabbed her body, my palms was bathed in her blood.

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    #4

    Re: my palm was bathed

    The second sentence is a comma splice. It would be okay without the "was".
    I am not a teacher or a native speaker.

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    #5

    Re: my palm was bathed

    Use "palms" if you must, but "bathe" does not work for me. Figuratively, "bathed in blood" implies a ruthless violence that I don't think you intend.

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    #6

    Re: my palm was bathed

    I see. I am trying to practice it.

    So what about this?

    She was crying. He cupped her face. His palms were bathed in her tears.

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    #7

    Re: my palm was bathed

    Quote Originally Posted by alpacinoutd View Post
    So what about this?

    She was crying. He cupped her face. His palms were bathed in her tears.
    It works for me — and you know I'm hard to please.
    I am not a teacher.

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    #8

    Re: my palm was bathed

    It's technically correct but not a natural turn of phrase for a native speaker.

    In BrE it would be unusal to say "palms" alone. Despite the redundancy the natural way would be to say "the palms of is hands" or just "hands".
    Retired magazine editor and native British English speaker - not a teacher

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    #9

    Re: my palm was bathed

    Quote Originally Posted by alpacinoutd View Post
    I want to see if I can use palm. So, what about this?

    She had shot herself. I grabbed her body, my palms was bathed in her blood.

    In additional to the comma splice, you have an agreement error with the second part.
    Wear short sleeves! Support your right to bare arms!

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    #10

    Re: my palm was bathed

    Also, the whole 'blood on palms' things draws a pretty strong religious comparison - why is he cupping her blood in his hands like some kind of messianic figure, instead of applying direct pressure (palms down!) on the wound?

    Probably because I heard it about a million times as a child, but once I read the original sentence, I immediately thought of this hymn.

    Edit: She had shot herself. I pressed my palm over the wound to stop the blood, but it still flowed through my fingers.

    There, now she's no saint, and he can literally feel her life ebbing away between his fingers.
    Last edited by Skrej; 31-Jul-2020 at 01:25. Reason: expanded
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