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    verb for strands of hair

    Hello,

    I am writing a short story. In it, I want to describe a girl with a bun who dances. Imagine a girl has a bun in the back of her head, and then there are some loose strands of hair hanging from her head.

    First, what is a verb for describing that? Can I use "cascade" to talk about a few strands of hair in front of her head that fall over her face?

    Second, when she dances, those strands of hair move in the air. How can I describe that?

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    Re: verb for strands of hair

    Second, when she dances, those strands of hair move in the air. How can I describe that?
    Her strands of hair dance along with her dance steps.
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    Re: verb for strands of hair

    Cascading suggests lots of hair, not a few strands.

    The loose strands might:

    - swirl
    - float
    - dangle
    - sway
    - toss

    . . . or any number of things.

    It kind of depends on the dance. And the dancer.
    I'm not a teacher. I speak American English. I've tutored writing at the University of Southern Maine and have done a good deal of copy editing and writing, occasionally for publication.

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    Re: verb for strands of hair

    Thanks. And how can I complete the sentence?

    1. She had her hair swept up in a tight bun with a few loose strands of hair swaying in front of her face.?

    2. She had her hair swept up in a tight bun with a few loose strands of hair floating in the air?

    3. She had her hair swept up in a tight bun with a few loose strands of hair swirling vigorously as she danced to the tune. ?
    Last edited by Rover_KE; 04-Aug-2020 at 22:40. Reason: deleting unnecessary quote

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    Re: verb for strands of hair

    Yes. Get rid of "of hair" and they're all good.
    I'm not a teacher. I speak American English. I've tutored writing at the University of Southern Maine and have done a good deal of copy editing and writing, occasionally for publication.

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    Re: verb for strands of hair

    She had her hair swept up in a tight bun with a few loose strands swaying in front of her face.
    She had her hair swept up in a tight bun with a few loose strands floating in the air.
    She had her hair swept up in a tight bun with a few loose strands swirling vigorously as she danced to the tune.

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    Re: verb for strands of hair

    I am not a great fan of swirling.

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    Re: verb for strands of hair

    Quote Originally Posted by Tdol View Post
    I am not a great fan of swirling.
    It makes me dizzy. I avoid it at all costs.
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    Re: verb for strands of hair

    Maybe I can use "swirl" if the character is drunk and doing some crazy dancing!

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    Re: verb for strands of hair

    Quote Originally Posted by alpacinoutd View Post
    Maybe I can use "swirl" if the character is drunk and doing some crazy dancing!
    To swirl is to spin in a spiral. It happens in ballet dancing maybe.
    I am not a teacher or a native speaker.

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