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    Re: tantalizingly good and harmless

    Quote Originally Posted by alpacinoutd View Post
    You are right. My bad. I "want" to use to those words.
    Aha! I was wondering who said you had to use them.

    So good. That means you can let go of them. Or you can use them somewhere else.

    That would be better than trying to squeeze too many ideas into sentences. Your "tantalizingly good and harmless" is an example. Why is harmless tantalizing? Slow down. Make one thought follow another. That's better than piling them on top of each other.

    Keep asking yourself: Do I need this adjective? Do I need to describe that? Is this moving the story forward? Or is it a distraction?

    The way to learn to write — in any language — is to read. A lot. Every day. Dive in. Soak it up. Immerse yourself.
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    Re: tantalizingly good and harmless

    Quote Originally Posted by Charlie Bernstein View Post
    Aha! I was wondering who said you had to use them.

    So good. That means you can let go of them. Or you can use them somewhere else.

    That would be better than trying to squeeze too many ideas into sentences. Your "tantalizingly good and harmless" is an example. Why is harmless tantalizing? Slow down. Make one thought follow another. That's better than piling them on top of each other.

    Keep asking yourself: Do I need this adjective? Do I need to describe that? Is this moving the story forward? Or is it a distraction?

    The way to learn to write in any language is to read. A lot. Every day. Dive in. Soak it up. Immerse yourself.
    Thanks for your advice. Very useful.

    What do you think about this?

    She was a poison pill, but one that tasted tantalizingly sweet.

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    Re: tantalizingly good and harmless

    If you already know how she "tasted", then she's not "tantalisingly sweet". If you use "tantalising" it's because you want to say that you get the impression that something would have a certain characteristic.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: tantalizingly good and harmless

    Quote Originally Posted by emsr2d2 View Post
    If you already know how she "tasted", then she's not "tantalisingly sweet". If you use "tantalising" it's because you want to say that you get the impression that something would have a certain characteristic.
    Aha. So you can't say something or someone is tantalizing if you have already tried them.

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    Re: tantalizingly good and harmless

    Not really, no. You might say that a bowl of cherries looks tantalisingly sweet but once you've tried them, you know whether they are or not.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: tantalizingly good and harmless

    Quote Originally Posted by emsr2d2 View Post
    Not really, no. You might say that a bowl of cherries looks tantalisingly sweet but once you've tried them, you know whether they are or not.
    What about this:

    She was a poison pill, but one that tasted deceptively sweet.

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