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    Talking Converting informal to formal speech style

    Please help me im having a hard time translating this casual speech into frozen speech style/formal style





    And this is my speech about my passion.
    When i was young at first i didnt know what i wanted to do with myself , what my passion is and who i wanted to be.
    At first i was just studying and studying for the sake of studying without goal in mind no future dream that was until i started homescooling tho i didnt know what to do. to be honest i had plenty of free time i can do whatever i want and study how i want to and strangely enough i actually got lost and confused.
    Since for once i was alone with my mind with my thoughts i didnt have to improve to anyone for once i didnt have to compete for something anymore for a while for a longer time so i started pondering and pondered until i found who i want to be well not exactly but what i wanted to do. I theres twon things i wanted to to with my life. One was to become a writer i wanted to write. To tell a story a grand tail of a brilliant adventure of a strory that i hope i would be able to last for such a long time and then theres the second one my second wish i wanted to become adventurer to explore the unknown.
    To travel around the world and not only this world but worlds beyond. So i was also thinking as well as an astronaut. Going up there in space somewhere unknown ive always wanted to face the unknown but then again tho i dont have the courage to do so yet. This is why i started writing first at first i was just doing it just as an experimentation to see how good i was.
    But then slowly eventually i started actually taking it somewhat passionately. I made a story and i made well i started writing story.
    Im not done with it but i finally found the courage to do so. Im not yet done with writing the story tho but eventually ill get there. But hey its the first step to do for a brighter future for myself i guess. anyways, thats all for now thank u for watching this speech and goodbye

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    Re: Converting informal to formal speech style

    What ideas do you have to do it? What constitutes a formal style to you?

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    Re: Converting informal to formal speech style

    Quote Originally Posted by Ineedwelp View Post
    Please help me. I'm having a hard time translating this casual speech into frozen speech style/formal style.

    And This is my speech about my passion.

    When I was young, at first I didn't know what I wanted to do with myself, what my passion is was and who I wanted to be.

    At first, I was just studying and studying for the sake of studying without a goal in mind, no future dreams. That was until I started homeschooling, though I didn't know what to do.

    To be honest, I had plenty of free time. I can could do whatever I wanted, and study how I wanted to and, strangely enough, I actually got lost and confused.

    Since for once I was alone with my mind with my thoughts, I didn't have to improve prove anything to anyone. For once I didn't have to compete for something anymore for a while for a longer time so I started pondering, and I pondered until I found who I wanted to be.

    Well, not exactly, but what I wanted to do.

    I Theres There were twon two things I wanted to to do with my life.

    One was to become a writer - I wanted to write. To tell a story, a grand tail tale of a brilliant adventure of or a strory story that I hoped i would be able to would last for such a long time.

    and Then there's the second one. My second wish i wanted was to become an adventurer to explore the unknown.

    I wanted to travel around the world and - not only this world but worlds beyond.

    So I was also thinking as well as about being an astronaut. Going up there in space, somewhere unknown.

    I'
    ve always wanted to face the unknown but then again tho although I don't have the courage to do so yet.

    This is why I started writing. first At first, I was just doing it just as an experimentation experiment to see how good I was.

    But then slowly eventually I started actually taking it somewhat passionately seriously.

    I made a story and I made well I started writing story. This whole sentence makes no sense so I can't correct it.

    I'm not done with it but I finally found the courage to do so start it.

    I'm not yet done with writing the story though but eventually I'll get there. But hey, it's the first step to do for a brighter future for myself me, I guess.

    Anyways, that's all for now. Thank you for watching listening to this speech and goodbye.
    Welcome to the forum.

    Please note my multiple corrections above. Regardless of whether you are writing formal or informal English, certain rules must be followed. They are:

    - Start every sentence with a capital letter.
    - Always capitalise the word "I" (first person singular plural).
    - End every sentence with one appropriate punctuation mark.
    - Always put a space after a comma, full stop, question mark or exclamation mark.
    - Don't put a space before a comma, full stop, question mark or exclamation mark.
    - Always use an apostrophe in the appropriate place.

    Don't write non-standard things like "tho" and "u". They are not words.

    I have not attempted to change this into "formal speech". That's your job. I have simply shown you how to write correctly, added some missing words and made some minor grammatical changes.

    What on earth is "frozen speech"?
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: Converting informal to formal speech style

    Quote Originally Posted by emsr2d2 View Post
    . . . What on earth is "frozen speech"?
    That's what I want to know.

    Welcome, Ineedwelp!
    Last edited by Charlie Bernstein; 08-Sep-2020 at 15:24.
    I'm not a teacher. I speak American English. I've tutored writing at the University of Southern Maine and have done a good deal of copy editing and writing, occasionally for publication.

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