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    With awareness

    With awareness, not only the great energy of this group is not wasted due to shyness, resentment, anxiety, fear of the crowd, and other things, but also by directing this great source of energy towards creativity, writing, lecturing, art, and other valuable works all use these positive features.



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    Re: With awareness

    No, the sentence is too long and is trying to say too many things. What follows after "but also" is not related to the earlier part and does not make sense.
    I am not a teacher or a native speaker.

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    Re: With awareness

    Quote Originally Posted by topman85 View Post
    With awareness, not only the great energy of this group is not wasted due to shyness, resentment, anxiety, fear of the crowd, and other things, but also by directing this great source of energy towards creativity, writing, lecturing, art, and other valuable works all use these positive features.

    Did I write it correctly? (I'd use "Have I written it correctly?")
    Note my correction and comment above.

    I have no idea what your long, convoluted sentence means. Please try to explain it to us differently and more clearly.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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