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    #1

    Tried to brutally kill her

    The following is an extraction from ETimes.

    A shocking incident came to light on September 14 from Hathras in Uttar Pradesh, where a 19-year-old girl was gang-raped and tried to brutally kill her.

    I think it should be '... where a 19-year-old girl was gang-raped and was tried to be brutally killed'.

    https://m.timesofindia.com/entertain...w/78397816.cms
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    #2

    Re: Tried to brutally kill her

    The second clause needs a subject.

    A shocking incident came to light on September 14 from Hathras in Uttar Pradesh, where a 19-year-old girl was gang-raped and the rapists tried to brutally kill her.
    I am not a teacher or a native speaker.

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    #3

    Re: Tried to brutally kill her

    I think brutality is inherent in murder. I would say:

    and they (the rapists) tried to kill her.
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    #4

    Re: Tried to brutally kill her

    Quote Originally Posted by Rollercoaster1 View Post
    I think it should be '... where a 19-year-old girl was gang-raped and was tried to be brutally killed'.
    No. "tried" is a verb that really does not work in the passive voice. Your version is not only ungrammatical but it sounds as if you're saying that the girl herself tried to be killed.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    #5

    Re: Tried to brutally kill her

    Although I understand what the article says, I don't really think it's well-written.

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    #6

    Re: Tried to brutally kill her

    It's atrociously-written.

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