I guess posting a fragment of my essay might have been treated as "an attempt to receive feedback and receive a good grade", but I didn't mean/intend that; I just wanted you to have a look at it and comment on my quality of written English as well (as one of the users suggested). I don't want any particular corrections; I need your general opinion about my English.
I noticed a new thread had been created (here's the link: https://www.usingenglish.com/forum/t...n-the-one-hand) but it's a closed one, so I can't respond to it.

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