the novelty of their marriage

[Charlie Bernstein]

Yes. It was a slip. I fixed it in post #8.

What about the rest of it?

How would you write it Charlie?

It look to me like you're on the right track.

Your vocabulary is strong. Keep building it. The more you build it, the more ways you'll have to tell a story.

[alpacinoutd]

It look to me like you're on the right track.

Your vocabulary is strong. Keep building it. The more you build it, the more ways you'll have to tell a story.

Thanks Charlie.

Just so I'm clear, you wouldn't change anything here?

"I have given this a lot of thought George." He looked at her with apprehension. "I marry you. Then the thrill of our relationship would fade after six months. The novelty would pale and I wouldn't feel a spark of excitement when I hear your voice. After a few years, we drift apart and the next thing you know, we lawyer up to get a divorce. So, my answer is no. Let's not get married." George was speechless.

[emsr2d2]

Thanks, Charlie.

Just so I'm clear, wouldn't you wouldn't change anything here?

"I have given this a lot of thought, George." He looked at her with apprehension. "I marry you. Then the thrill of our relationship would fade fades after six months. The novelty would pale wears off and I wouldn't no longer feel a spark of excitement when I hear your voice. After a few years, we drift apart and the next thing you know, we lawyer up to get a divorce. So, my answer is no. Let's not get married." George was speechless.

See above for the changes I would make. Having started with the present tense for "I marry you", I would continue in the present tense.

[alpacinoutd]

See above for the changes I would make. Having started with the present tense for "I marry you", I would continue in the present tense.

You are great to have here.

[Charlie Bernstein]

. . . Having started with the present tense for "I marry you", I would continue in the present tense.

Yup! You beat me to it!

[emsr2d2]

Yup! You beat me to it!

Yes, but only by one day, one hour and 59 minutes!