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    what make the trip more appealing was...

    Hi all,
    I struggle with the phrase "What make the trip more appealing was...". Please correct me if my sentence is wrong:

    "What made the trip even more appealing was the brief respite they were granted from the continuous rain that had made all outdoor activities impossible where they got to do a bit of outing to vent the frustration that had build up throughout the days. "

    What I meant was they couldn't be more excited when the rain finally stopped and they got to do a bit of outing.

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    #2

    Re: what make the trip more appealing was...

    Quote Originally Posted by learning101 View Post
    Hi all,
    I struggle with the phrase "What made the trip more appealing was...". Please correct me if my sentence is wrong:

    "What made the trip even more appealing was the brief respite they were granted from the continuous rain that had made all outdoor activities impossible. They got to do a bit of outing to vent the frustration that had built up throughout the days. "

    What I meant was they couldn't be more excited when the rain finally stopped and they got to do a bit of outing.
    The phrase "do a bit of outing" isn't natural in American English. Maybe Brits use it. In the sense of travel, we only use outing as a noun.

    I also wonder about "even more appealing." It doesn't sound like an appealing trip. You might try, "What made the trip more enjoyable. . . ."
    I'm not a teacher. I speak American English. I've tutored writing at the University of Southern Maine and have done a good deal of copy editing and writing, occasionally for publication.

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    Re: what make the trip more appealing was...

    Quote Originally Posted by Charlie Bernstein View Post
    The phrase "do a bit of outing" isn't natural in American English. Maybe Brits use it.
    We don't.

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    Re: what make the trip more appealing was...

    Quote Originally Posted by Charlie Bernstein View Post
    The phrase "do a bit of outing" isn't natural in American English. Maybe Brits use it. In the sense of travel, we only use outing as a noun.

    I also wonder about "even more appealing." It doesn't sound like an appealing trip. You might try, "What made the trip more enjoyable. . . ."
    Are you suggesting that "appealing" is not an appropriate adjective used with trip or what should an appealing trip look like?

    If "do a bit of outing" is not natural in American or British English then how should I change it?
    Last edited by Rover_KE; 29-Oct-2020 at 15:21. Reason: more questions to add on

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    Re: what make the trip more appealing was...

    ... the rain finally stopped and they were able to go out.

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    Re: what make the trip more appealing was...

    We do use "out" as a verb in BrE but exclusively to mean "to reveal something about someone else (usually their sexual orientation)". So "outing" is possible but it doesn't work with "do a bit of" and it's not at all appropriate to the context of post 1.
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    Re: what make the trip more appealing was...

    Right. That's why I restricted it to "In the sense of travel."
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    Re: what make the trip more appealing was...

    Quote Originally Posted by learning101 View Post
    Are you suggesting that "appealing" is not an appropriate adjective used with trip or what should an appealing trip look like?

    1. I mean that more only makes sense if the trip was already appealing. Since it rained, it sounds like it was not appealing. So more doesn't work.

    2. And since you're looking back at a trip that already happened, appealing isn't a good word choice. We look forward to trips that seem appealing, promising, or attractive. But when we remember a good trip we took, we might say say that it was enjoyable, pleasant, or fun. You could also say that the good weather made the trip better.

    But if the trip is over, it's too late for it to be appealing.


    If "do a bit of outing" is not natural in American or British English then how should I change it?

    It depends on what you mean. You might say you did some traveling, sightseeing, touring, or exploring.
    Look up outing and appealing.
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    Re: what make the trip more appealing was...

    Quote Originally Posted by Charlie Bernstein View Post
    The phrase "do a bit of outing" isn't natural in American English. Maybe Brits use it.
    Quote Originally Posted by emsr2d2 View Post
    We do use "out" as a verb in BrE but exclusively to mean "to reveal something about someone else (usually their sexual orientation)". So "outing" is possible but it doesn't work with "do a bit of" and it's not at all appropriate to the context of post 1.
    Quote Originally Posted by Charlie Bernstein View Post
    Right. That's why I restricted it to "In the sense of travel."
    I was responding to the part at the beginning of the top quote above. I wanted to make it clear that Brits don't use "do a bit of outing" but we do use "out" as a verb.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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