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Economist2010

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Hi Mohamed,

I am always hearing about you good. People are considering you as a role model of a best marketer. This what my passion about working with you so that I can learn.

I am following your successes from a step to another, for a while. I hope that I can reach 50% of what you have already reached in your career path.

I am worried that you might get annoyed of me keeping sending you. I am sorry for that but this is due my ambitions
 

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Try:

I have been hearing good things about you.

And:

I have been watching you from afar. I admire you for what you have done with your career.
 

emsr2d2

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Hi Mohamed,

I am always hearing about you good.
I always hear good things about you.

People are considering you as a role model of a best marketer.
Many people consider you a role model as a ????? (What's a "marketer"?)

This what my passion about working with you so that I can learn.
I'm passionate about working with you because I can learn a lot.

I am following your successes from a step to another, for a while.
I have been following your successful career for a while.

I hope that I can reach 50% of what you have already reached in your career path.
I hope to achieve even half of what you already have.

I am worried that you might get annoyed of me keeping sending you. I am sorry for that but this is due my ambitions.
I hope you don't mind my contacting you but I'm very ambitious.

Please see my corrected/improved version of each sentence above.
 
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