Debashree is a former..

[Dukul12345]

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▪ Debashree is a former student of Rabindranath Tagore University. He has been a fan of Apurba for almost three years. Popular actor Ziaul Farooq Apurba was admitted to the hospital due to corona. He is undergoing treatment at Bangladesh Specialized Hospital in Shyamoli. Anxiety was growing as his physical condition was very miserable. Finally, on Sunday, it was found out that this actor is recovering. His physical condition is improving. Plasma has been given to his body. Then his physical condition deteriorated a bit. Then anxiety spread in Natakpara and Apurba's close-knit devotees. He is slowly responding to treatment. Apurba has become much healthier.A friend of Apurba's producer said, 'Apurba is a little better after giving plasma. However, Hitchcock's problem is not completely resolved yet. He will have to stay in the hospital for some more time.

 

[Charlie Bernstein]

Please correct any mistakes in this piece of writing:

▪ Debashree is a former student of Rabindranath Tagore University. He has been a fan of Apurba for almost three years. Popular actor Ziaul Farooq Apurba was admitted to the hospital due to corona. He is undergoing treatment at Bangladesh Specialized Hospital in Shyamoli. Anxiety was growing as his physical condition was very bad. Finally, on Sunday, the actor seemed to be recovering. His physical condition was improving. He was given plasma. Then his physical condition deteriorated a bit, and anxiety spread among Natakpara and Apurba's close-knit devotees. He is slowly responding to treatment. Apurba has become much healthier. [space] A friend of Apurba's producer said, 'Apurba is a little better after being given plasma.' However, his problem is not completely resolved yet. He will have to stay in the hospital longer.

It's a good start, but there are some problems:

- The first two sentences don't connect with the rest of the story. Other than being a fan, what does Debashree have to do with it? And why do we care where Debashree went to school?

- Naakpara? Hitchcock? Who are they, and what do they have to do with the story? Remember: We can read your words, but we can't read your mind.

- Word choice: His condition was not miserable. His condition was bad, so he felt miserable.

- You started a quote but didn't end it. So I guessed at where the quote ended. Put quotation marks at the beginnings AND ends of quotes.