Say:
I've been admitted to Butler Community College.
To whoever it may concern,
I Mr Ocharo, am requesting your approval for an expedited interview appointment because
I secured an admission with the butler community college in United State of America. This is after successful application through an online platform. The institution expects me to report on January 2021 in person, for a commencement of a pre-nursing program running for two years.
I actually could not apply for the visa earlier because I had to wait for the paperwork which was sent from the United States by the institution
I am humbly requesting for a reschedule of my student visa appointment date from April 14th 2021 to Novermber 30th 2020. This will provide adequate time for travel preparation and prompt reporting as dictated on the admission letter.
I learned the possibility of appointment rescheduling through the United states embassy website, under the FAQ segment in reference to the embassy's policy. Kindly consider my request
Say:
I've been admitted to Butler Community College.
Not a professional teacher
And:
I applied for admission through sn online platform platform.
Not a professional teacher
Ocharo, in addition to looking carefully at the corrections that teechar made, note that he put an empty line space between each paragraph. That's important when laying out a letter (or an essay) because it makes it so much easier to read. I'm sure you will agree that teechar's new version is much more pleasant to look at than your original.
Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.