Motivation Letter for Master's degree (scholarship)

[teechar]

No. I mean did the instructions ask you to write about only those two points?

[kennai]

No. I mean did the instructions ask you to write about only those two points?

After I checked, they asks applicants to:

1.how your preferred courses relate to one of our recommended study subjects.
Study subjects like :
1.1 Climate Change and the Environment
1.2 Disaster Risk Management
1.3 Food Security
I chose the topic in Climate change


2.describe the skills and knowledge you want to gain from your preferred courses.
3.describe how these skills and knowledge are important to your country’s development.

Thank you

[teechar]

1.how your preferred courses relate to one of our recommended study subjects.
Study subjects like :
1.1 Climate Change and the Environment
1.2 Disaster Risk Management
1.3 Food Security
I chose the topic in Climate change

I think paragraph #4 addresses that.

2.describe the skills and knowledge you want to gain from your preferred courses.
3.describe how these skills and knowledge are important to your country’s development.

Your letter has not addressed those points. Write a paragraph about each of them.
You will also need to condense the first three paragraphs above into one or two at most. Otherwise, your letter will be too long.

[Tarheel]

Do you mean that what I wrote does not cover all the points? Or something else?

Please note the changes.

[Tarheel]

They ask applicants to:

1. Show how your preferred courses relate to one of our recommended study subjects.

Study subjects like :
1.1 Climate change and the environment
1.2 Disaster risk management
1.3 Food security
I chose the topic in climate change.


2. space here Describe the skills and knowledge you want to gain from your preferred courses.
3. space here Describe how these skills and knowledge are important to your country’s development.

Please note the changes.

[kennai]

Please note the changes.

For the point that you asked me to change, I copied from the scholarship website does it mean that the website is wrong?

Thank you

[Tarheel]

For the point that you asked me to change, I copied from the scholarship website. Does that mean that the website is wrong?

Are you talking about capitalization?

Were those things copied directly from the website?

[kennai]

Are you talking about capitalization?

Were those things copied directly from the website?

Yes I copied directly from the website.


Thank you

[Tarheel]

Yes, I copied directly from the website.

OK.

[Tarheel]

Try:

My passion for data science started when I took a short course at a computer institute in Thailand. I learned that data science is a powerful tool that can help businesses analyze. the mass of data that they deal with and to make decisions.

I don't know why you can't mention the name of the country. As for the school, don't they want people to know about them?