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    Post The best lesson

    1-The best lesson I learnt in my recent managerial/executive roles is that great leader is who empower others not who use power or authority.

    2-The best thing that I tried in my recent managerial/executive roles and that it paid off, is that great leader is who empower others not who use power or authority.

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    Re: The best lesson

    Quote Originally Posted by Economist2010 View Post
    1-The best lesson I learnt in my recent management roles is that a great leader is one who empowers others, not one who abuses power or authority.

    2-The best thing that I tried in my recent management roles and that it paid off, is that a great leader is one who empowers others, not one who abuses power or authority.
    The first one is better.

    The second one doesn't quite make sense. If you diagram it, it says "The thing I tried is a great leader is one who empowers others."

    You didn't try a great leader, right?
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    Re: The best lesson

    Quote Originally Posted by Economist2010 View Post
    1. The best most important lesson I learnt in my recent managerial/executive roles is that a great leader is one who empowers others, not one who uses power or authority.

    2. The best thing that I tried in my recent managerial/executive roles and that it paid off, is that great leader is who empower others not who use power or authority. The opening doesn't work at all.
    See above.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: The best lesson

    Quote Originally Posted by Charlie Bernstein View Post
    The first one is better.

    The second one doesn't quite make sense. If you diagram it, it says "The thing I tried is a great leader is one who empowers others."

    You didn't try a great leader, right?
    Many thanks for your suggestion.
    ""The thing I tried in my recent executive roles, is a great leader is one who empowers others, not one who abuses power or authority."

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    Re: The best lesson

    Quote Originally Posted by Economist2010 View Post
    Many thanks for your suggestion.
    ""The thing I tried in my recent executive roles, is a great leader is one who empowers others, not one who abuses power or authority."
    That doesn't work. You missed the point. See posts 2 and 3 again.

    See how you used is twice? It doesn't make sense.

    In the first part, you're starting to tell us the thing you tried. So in the second part, you need to tell us what the thing is. But you don't. It's a non sequitur. (You can look up non sequitur.)
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    Re: The best lesson

    Quote Originally Posted by Charlie Bernstein View Post
    That doesn't work. You missed the point. See posts 2 and 3 again.

    See how you used is twice? It doesn't make sense.

    In the first part, you're starting to tell us the thing you tried. So in the second part, you need to tell us what the thing is. But you don't. It's a non sequitur. (You can look up non sequitur.)
    Can I say it this way:

    "The best thing that I tried in my recent management and executive roles and that paid off, is to empower others, not to abuse power or authority."

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    Re: The best lesson

    Why do you keep using "tried"?
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    Re: The best lesson

    Quote Originally Posted by Economist2010 View Post
    Can I say it this way:

    "The best thing that I tried in my recent management and executive roles and that paid off, is empowering others, not abusing power or authority."
    You can use -ing to turn a verb into a noun, a gerund. That way, it's a thing.

    Do you feel there's a difference between a management role and an executive role? Do you feel you need to use both management and executive? Would supervisory work?

    Since it's the best thing you tried, the reader will know that it paid off.
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    Re: The best lesson

    "The thing that I tried in my recent managerial roles and that paid off, is that a great leader is one who empowers others, not one who abuses power or authority."

    The above is another suggestion. I removed "best" and kept "paid off"

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    Re: The best lesson

    The word tried doesn't fit there. You are talking about something you learned. lso, we can't be sure what you did and how it paid off. That brings me to my next point. It would probably be better to say what you did and what the results were. Telling people what you did and how you learned from it helps them to understand your point better than speaking in generalities.
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