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1-The best lesson I learnt in my recent managerial/executive roles is that great leader is who empower others not who use power or authority.

2-The best thing that I tried in my recent managerial/executive roles and that it paid off, is that great leader is who empower others not who use power or authority.
 

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1-The best lesson I learnt in my recent management roles is that a great leader is one who empowers others, not one who abuses power or authority.

2-The best thing that I tried in my recent management roles [STRIKE]and[/STRIKE] that [STRIKE]it[/STRIKE] paid off[STRIKE],[/STRIKE] is that a great leader is one who empowers others, not one who abuses power or authority.
The first one is better.

The second one doesn't quite make sense. If you diagram it, it says "The thing I tried is a great leader is one who empowers others."

You didn't try a great leader, right?
 

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1. The [STRIKE]best[/STRIKE] most important lesson I learnt in my recent managerial/executive roles is that a great leader is one who empowers others, not one who uses power or authority.

2. The best thing that I tried in my recent managerial/executive roles and that it paid off, is that great leader is who empower others not who use power or authority. :cross: The opening doesn't work at all.

See above.
 

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The first one is better.

The second one doesn't quite make sense. If you diagram it, it says "The thing I tried is a great leader is one who empowers others."

You didn't try a great leader, right?

Many thanks for your suggestion.
""The thing I tried in my recent executive roles, is a great leader is one who empowers others, not one who abuses power or authority."
 

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Many thanks for your suggestion.
""The thing I tried in my recent executive roles, is a great leader is one who empowers others, not one who abuses power or authority."
That doesn't work. You missed the point. See posts 2 and 3 again.

See how you used is twice? It doesn't make sense.

In the first part, you're starting to tell us the thing you tried. So in the second part, you need to tell us what the thing is. But you don't. It's a non sequitur. (You can look up non sequitur.)
 

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That doesn't work. You missed the point. See posts 2 and 3 again.

See how you used is twice? It doesn't make sense.

In the first part, you're starting to tell us the thing you tried. So in the second part, you need to tell us what the thing is. But you don't. It's a non sequitur. (You can look up non sequitur.)

Can I say it this way:

"The best thing that I tried in my recent management and executive roles and that paid off, is to empower others, not to abuse power or authority."
 

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Why do you keep using "tried"?
 

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Can I say it this way:

"The best thing that I tried in my recent management and executive roles [STRIKE]and that paid off[/STRIKE], is empowering others, not abusing power or authority."
You can use -ing to turn a verb into a noun, a gerund. That way, it's a thing.

Do you feel there's a difference between a management role and an executive role? Do you feel you need to use both management and executive? Would supervisory work?

Since it's the best thing you tried, the reader will know that it paid off.
 

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"The thing that I tried in my recent managerial roles and that paid off, is that a great leader is one who empowers others, not one who abuses power or authority."

The above is another suggestion. I removed "best" and kept "paid off"
 

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The word tried doesn't fit there. You are talking about something you learned. Àlso, we can't be sure what you did and how it paid off. That brings me to my next point. It would probably be better to say what you did and what the results were. Telling people what you did and how you learned from it helps them to understand your point better than speaking in generalities.
 

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You could replace "tried" with "put into practice".
 

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"The thing that I put into practice in my recent managerial roles and that paid off, is that a great leader is one who empowers others, not one who abuses power or authority."
 

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"The thing that I put into practice in my recent managerial roles and that paid off [no comma] is that a great leader is one who empowers others, not one who abuses power or authority."

Those words at the beginning of the sentence constitute a noun phrase and are the subject of the sentence.

I believe I would settle for being a good leader and let others aspire to greatness. :)

It does look like your writing is getting better.
 

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Those words at the beginning of the sentence constitute a noun phrase and are the subject of the sentence.

I believe I would settle for being a good leader and let others aspire to greatness. :)

It does look like your writing is getting better.

"The thing that I put into practice in my recent managerial roles and that paid off is that a great leader is one who empowers others, not one who abuses power or authority."

So the above is totally correct and I can use it?

Someone said the last parts contains some errors. Is that correct?
 

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Sure. Use it how?
 
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Sure. Use it what?

Use the below sentence:

"The thing that I put into practice in my recent managerial roles and that paid off is that a great leader is one who empowers others, not one who abuses power or authority."
 

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Sorry for that (post #15). I meant to ask how you were going to use it. My apologies.
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You might want to find a better word than "thing" for a professional LinkedIn bio.
 
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