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    the snow creaked beneath his boots

    Is this correct?

    The city was blanketed in a grayish snow as he trudged home, feeling the snow creaking beneath his beaten boots.

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    Re: the snow creaked beneath his boots

    Yes. Normally snow is white, but I'm guessing it was grayish because people had been walking all over it and getting it dirty. Am I right?
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    Re: the snow creaked beneath his boots

    Quote Originally Posted by Tarheel View Post
    Yes. Normally snow is white, but I'm guessing it was grayish because people had been walking all over it and getting it dirty. Am I right?

    Yes. The city was dirty and polluted and because of the smog, the snow had turned grayish. Does that make sense?

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    Re: the snow creaked beneath his boots

    It works as a poetic touch, but it is not a standard verb.

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    Re: the snow creaked beneath his boots

    Quote Originally Posted by Tdol View Post
    It works as a poetic touch, but it is not a standard verb.
    What verb do you mean?

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    Re: the snow creaked beneath his boots

    Quote Originally Posted by Tdol View Post
    It works as a poetic touch, but it is not a standard verb.
    He could have said crunched, but that would have been predictable. Creaked is more evocative. (Or as you say, poetic.)

    Anyhow, let's keep it!
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    Re: the snow creaked beneath his boots

    Quote Originally Posted by alpacinoutd View Post
    Yes. The city was dirty and polluted and because of the smog, the snow had turned grayish. Does that make sense?
    My wife lived in Minnesota, a very snowy US state, for a long time. They have a word for gray snow there: snirt — part snow, part dirt.

    (Don't use it. Most people won't know what you're talking about.)
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    Re: the snow creaked beneath his boots

    Quote Originally Posted by alpacinoutd View Post
    What verb do you mean?

    Creaked- floorboards creak, snow only does artistically.

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    Re: the snow creaked beneath his boots

    Quote Originally Posted by Tdol View Post
    Creaked- floorboards creak, snow only does artistically.
    At first I thought you meant trudged. I agree that crunching is better.
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