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    I want little bit of blue sky

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    I miss my old life. I want little bit of blue sky, a little bit of fresh breeze. I want some crisp air, some walk in the field. I want some birds singing, some tree branches swaying.

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    Re: I want little bit of blue sky

    There's a word missing near the start of sentence 2. Can you work out what you have omitted?
    Also, you have a singular where you should have a plural in sentence 3.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: I want little bit of blue sky

    Quote Originally Posted by emsr2d2 View Post
    There's a word missing near the start of sentence 2. Can you work out what you have omitted?
    Also, you have a singular where you should have a plural in sentence 3.

    I miss my old life. I want a little bit of blue sky, a little bit of fresh breeze. I want some crisp air, some walks in the field. I want some birds singing, some tree branches swaying.

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    Re: I want little bit of blue sky

    Try:

    I want to hear birds singing, hear tree branches swaying.
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