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    alpacinoutd is online now Key Member
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    the city is stuck in the past

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    The world was now almost two decades into the twenty first century, the age of driverless electric cars but this city was stuck in the 1990s. The tired diesel cars in the city belched a thick black smoke that blackened the lungs of their drivers.

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    Re: the city is stuck in the past

    Quote Originally Posted by alpacinoutd View Post
    Is this good?

    The world was now almost two decades into the twenty-first century, the age of driverless electric cars,
    but this city was stuck in the 1990s. The tired diesel cars in the city belched a thick black smoke that blackened the lungs of their drivers.
    I like it.

    One note: Diesel exhaust usually blackens the lungs of the drivers behind the belching cars and trucks, not their own drivers. So I got rid of their.
    I'm not a teacher. I speak American English. I've tutored writing at the University of Southern Maine and have done a good deal of copy editing and writing, occasionally for publication.

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    Tdol is offline Editor, UsingEnglish.com
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    Re: the city is stuck in the past

    Or blackened drivers' lungs

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